You Once Said To Me...

You Once Said To Me...

A Poem by SasuSakuLoVer
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This is a woman who loved a man but that man once said many things to her and never did any of them...

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You once said to me you loved me,

But you never loved me,

You  once said to me you will not hurt me,

but you hurt me,

You once said to me you will never leave me,

But you leave me,

You once said to you will awknowledge me,

But you never awknowledge me,

You once you accept me,

But you never accept me,

 

 

Am I nothing to you?....

Am I?!

 

....

 

I love you but...not today and not tommorow,

I will never love you ever again,

Because...

 

You are nothing to me now than a staranger who once said many things to me and never did any of them...

© 2013 SasuSakuLoVer


Author's Note

SasuSakuLoVer
sighh,that was a long poem it just pop on my mind and this is the result please review and rate.

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It is a good poem. Not my cup of tea but I guess I'm just weird that way, so just ignore me. ^^
There is one suggestion though (even though I'm in no position to criticise anyones spelling when I'm no good at it myself), but try, if you will, changing that, "To" to a Too" in the acknowledge sentence.
Just a thought. ^^
Good poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


SasuSakuLoVer

9 Years Ago

thanks but its oky really :)
Bluefire

9 Years Ago

No problem. C:
A sad poem. When love is found out to be a lie. Disappoint our heart and mind. I like the closing line in the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


SasuSakuLoVer

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
a nice piece some grammar errors.. though i enjoyed reading it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


SasuSakuLoVer

9 Years Ago

Oh thank you and I know there's some grammar errors but I'm trying to improved my writings.
The dark story

9 Years Ago

Your most welcome.good luck for thhhat :)
that's a sad poem. ..
I like it though
It's very heartfelt and reminds me of my friend
It's good write
GOLD STARS!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SasuSakuLoVer

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
it was good except for some misspellings like accept needs to be accepted you know but in all it was a great poem i really enjoyed it

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SasuSakuLoVer

9 Years Ago

Thanks and sorry for misspellings.
Alexis Markum

9 Years Ago

Its okay everyone does it
Read the latest chapter then you will get it :P oh yeah nice poem :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SasuSakuLoVer

9 Years Ago

Thanks again Amanda!!!

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