~My Shadow....

This is for you Nikhi just for you.. xoxo

Li'l fights for chocolate tart...
Competing on who will run far...
Snatching the best dress to wear to the party..
Teasing each other when one turns dirty...

Nights up in the terrace
Laying on our backs,
Watching the constellations far...
We wish as we see a fallen star...

Childishly i wished for you to go so far..
That i could have every candy bar..

Now standing under this moonless sky..
I sigh....
As i see a lonely star falling by..
I pray for you to -come back...
Just please come back....

What to do?? When i am sad
I squeeze the pillow
But it doesn't hug me back...

Pl....please come back didu....
Your chotu needs you so bad...

Author's Note

I love my elder sister( didu) the most.I love you didu.It is just a simple poem dedicated to the person i love the most whom i miss the most.. :(.. she is my shadow and will always be never leaving me in darkness

Reviews

[Stephen]

Wow. This is the most meaningful poem I have read of yours. I could feel the emotions behind it and made me feel teary eyed. The trait I admired in poets or writers is the power they have to pull out of the reader the emotions that are portrayed in the writing. You really did that here. Awesome work!

[M.A.Rathore]

Very touching nostalgic poem written in superb style .The flow of the poen is as overwhelving as the falling tears from your eyes while composing this lovely piece and making your own spirit as high as the feelings of your true sister..
Fighting for general though less trivial thing sharing and not sharing the things you both had...I love the simplicity of the poem with clear message....

Li'l fights for chocolate tart...
Competing on who will run far...
Snatching the best dress to wear to the party..
Teasing each other when one turns dirty...

See the minute description of the time spent together nicely....

Nights up in the terrace
Laying on our backs,
Watching the constellations far...
We wish as we see a fallen star...

Childishly i wished for you to go so far..
That i could have every candy bar..

Now standing under this moonless sky..
I sigh....
As i see a lonely star falling by..
I pray for you to -come back...
Just please come back....

How lovely you spend all your tine with your sister...

What to do?? When i am sad
I squeeze the pillow
But it doesn't hug me back...

Pl....please come back didu....
Your chotu needs you so bad...
All the stanzas are written with heart...
Keep writing...
I compose on cell and in busy days so there may be some compositional misspelt can ve found ..though I am a teacher I can understand the effect of mistakes..Rest is fine..thanks cooperating...
-M.A.Rathore

[Sophy Freebirds]

The same here. I update on phone. No issues. Some typos do occur :)

[M.A.Rathore]

Thanks dear friend.....

[R Smith]

The saddest poem I have read, I hope you will feel better with time, my heartfelt best wishes to you :)

[ManasaC]

intricately written...showing the bond between sisters. It's very touching, though i never had the opportunity to experience the bond between sisters . Loved it!!!!

[SmittyJas]

Beautiful Poem and wonderful thoughts of your relationship with your sister as I read your words it shows a bond of love that will last a lifetime Blessing to you and your family.

[micky]

I'm a new writer recently and I love my family but could never write about them for this I admire you. It is a beautiful poem and I love it :}

[Sophy Freebirds]

:) thank you for your kind words Micky

[Emily Feret]

I knew within the first few lines this was about your sister! Beautiful

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much Emily :)

[Tom]

A poignant contemplation, penned with reflective yearning and sincere emotion, splendid Sophy !

[Sophy Freebirds]

;) thank you so much Tom..

[MsJewel]

There is nothing like the love of a sibling...no one can ever take their place. Your Shadow....so lovely. You have touched my heart with this sweet little gem.

:) Julie

[Sophy Freebirds]

Aww.. thank you so much dear;)

[Roger Turgeon]

She is lucky to be remember so fondly.....clearly she is with you now and always

[Sophy Freebirds]

O yea.she is. ;)