A Loveless Day

Loveless day like a sunless morning

Alone I sit in my lonesome dark room

Abrupt thoughts are anything but enchanting

Like dried flowers over a solitary tomb

A bunch of confused gipsy clouds

Uncertain whether to rain or fly

A few birds quietly observe the doubts

Some relentlessly try to touch the sky

Suddenly the clouds roar in thunder

Wind gets restless and trees start to tremble

Two heedless eyes look out in wonder

Do they find something to resemble?

Birds make haste to find any shelter

And some pedestrians do the same

No one wants any unexpected pelter

Only this life can be a dicey game

But no rain falls and wind slowly dies

Nor comes any light of morning ray

A lonesome soul now peacefully lies

Near the open window on a loveless day.

Reviews

[Annelise]

This is bleak and brilliant. It assaults the senses. It physically hurts to read and I love it :)

[Bewitching Sensations]

brilliant.. i got caught in the moment ...:)

[Mia]

"A bunch of confused gipsy clouds
Uncertain whether to rain or fly
A few birds quietly observe the doubts
Some relentlessly try to touch the sky"
A loveless day... what an amazing poem! It just flows so beautifully! Wonderful!!

[Monica-Antoinetta-Magda..]

I love the imagery you've used here, it's truly beautiful.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"But no rain falls and wind slowly dies
Nor comes any light of morning ray
A lonesome soul now peacefully lies
Near the open window on a loveless day."

~ Loneliness is felt... I love the imagery you have depicted through the "open window"~ I Love this Stanza...The ending was Excellent to this heartfelt write!

[MOON]

Great rhythm, nature taking its course reflecting a loveless day .

[emmajoy]

You've truly created a poem of scenic feelings, 'Birds make haste to find any shelter .. And some pedestrians do the same .. No one wants any unexpected pelter ,, Only this life can be a dicey game' : that stanza made me smile, could picture the happenings!