Absence of

When I look at you it makes me feel tired

The strands over your face

the scars on your cheek

a stoic stare that seeps into my soul

You walk long in the dark

stumbling alone

finding comfort in sound and yearning thought

All of my questions meet with silence

a quiet that makes the critter stir in my gut

for I suspect that an essential trait of being you

is the part that will always be absent

You are searching for a truth that does not exist

Reviews

[B]

I guess if one can not find peace within
to accept the absence of everyone
and feel full
well
no presence would make a soul feel lifted
part of being in truth
is simply accepting everything for what it is and isnt

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"part of being in truth
is simply accepting everything for what it is and isn't "
Exactly. Thanks for the review!

[jesserose99]

I really like this...a seeker...and one who isn't fully present in the moment with you because she is always seeking. This is beautiful..I feel tired for her too, so well expressed.

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Thank you! I'm glad it could make you feel that way.

[jesserose99]

Well, I'm reading again...and she is seeking for a truth that does not exist. In addition to 'seeking comfort in sound and yearning thought' I don't have my head screwed on straight methinks because I think I might have confused the meaning. You have to forgive me..I haven't been sleeping lately. I stand by my assertion that the words are crafted beautifully together..but I don't think she is as much of a seeker as I originally thought...lol. She is a bit of an enigma to me now. She seems more empty. Maybe I have it wrong again. Would love to hear your thoughts. Hope I haven't bugged you or rambled inanely too much. :)

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No! You haven't bugged me. In fact I'm really happy you've given it more thought. Exploring the meaning and trying to understand is what I love about writing poetry and as a result I think my poems tend to be a bit cryptic. Give me a moment and I'll explain my interpretation of it.

[jesserose99]

All right...well good. It really made me think, I read it over and over to tell you the truth because I liked it so much, trying to figure out just exactly what it was...and then I ended up overthinking it which is just like me...lol. I am glad my understanding of it is correct, because I empathize with that...'earth to jesse' being something the family jokes about. I've actually read a couple of your other poems and am really impressed. I plan on reading more. I like thinkers..where I have to ponder a bit. I appreciate you taking the time out to explain to me, because it makes this poem so rich I had to put it in my library. My whole extended family is from Kansas City, KS...I think at least..Overland Park?? had to throw the random out there. Anyway...thanks for sharing. Bloody good!!

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Thanks for all the kind words! I've only just started writing my own poetry in the last couple of months so it's really encouraging.