Until I'm Dead

Until I'm Dead

A Poem by Voice11

You know what its like when your bleeding inside...


The deepest pain I feel inside

maximized by my own lies

weeping willow growing tall

rope upon you, do you call?


Darkened skies all around

This little girl naught to be found

shiny dagger set with stone

through my heart all alone


Sinful moonlight in the skies

shining on me reveal the lies

rusty gun upon my bed

pull the trigger now I'm dead.






© 2012 Voice11

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awwww this is so pretty i luv it :D
luv ya gurlie

Posted 10 Years Ago

i like the dark feel and emotion that drags right out to the reader. well written and love the eerie/dark feel. =)

Posted 10 Years Ago

For a piece about the pain inside, the words writen were very beautiful. Each stana used well worded metaphors and the visions depicted came through with a haunting of emotions.

What I liked best about this piece was the third lines in each stanza... For the weeping will crys it's tears upon a shining dagger...in time...the shine fades giving way to only rust...that's used to end the day.

A piece writen with skill and heart, even if the heart was weeping at the time.

Great Ink,
Aaron Wolfie Maycroft

Posted 10 Years Ago

Beautifully chosen words that cut deep with a passion. This was a pleasure to read, even with its painful overtones. Your choice of imagery is always inspiring.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on August 12, 2009
Last Updated on May 18, 2012



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