The Snowflake

Written after hearing a piano piece my friend composed

A gentle breeze, a whirling wind

The snowflake falls and it begins

Swirling shape of grace and beauty

Falling tragedy from its purity

 

Faster, Faster falling apart

Breaking that of a beauties heart

Crystal  soul gone astray

that the swirling breeze pulls every which way

 

Beautiful Tragedy in your sight

Half the Darkness, Half the Light

The truth that lies in your mind

To cease this love is to be kind

 

For in the end the truth shall perish

and emotions longing you have cherished

Will be gone into the past so dark

Revealed only when the snowflake falls

in the Winter of the Heart

Reviews

[David W Moore III]

in the winter of the heart. oh that can have so many meanings, this is a great piece. I love the winter aspect (Try my World in D minor for a piece about music, winter and creation) Snowflakes are so beautiful and so fragile. If you try to catch it to look at it, it melts. If you let it fall to the ground, it combines with the rest to make a mound of snow... cherish it while it falls.

[The Analog Kid]

"Swirling shape of grace and beauty/Falling tragedy from its purity." This is such a nice line. I really enjoyed this one.

[Aurora Night]

I loved the imagery. You're meter is nice in the poem, it helps it flow and its easy for the reader to follow along. I love the diction you use in the third stanza. Great Job, keep writing.

[Taylor H.]

I'm making up for reviews I haven't returned. So you may get a few from me depending :). OK, i lvoed the imergy in this poem. You're a great poet. Keep it up!

[Livana Lowell]

The snow is such a broad inspiration for the author, therefore, it's difficult to produce an original piece revoling around it. So, I say to you, well done because this is beautiful and unique.

The image of the snowflake's journey from the sky to the icy ground you've created very well. Though in the second stanza, last line, "which" is unnecesary because you have "every" there.

Other than that, it's a wonderful poem and I am glad to have read it.

[St.Jimmy]

wow! It's amazing and beautiful
I would especially appreciate the rhyme scheme of the poem
emotions will only be revealed when the snowflakes falls in the winter of your heart
this is amazing thought
~Aaradhya

[Ethan Paz]

You are sure talented at describing nature. I can't describe nature very well at all without it being disconnected and lame. You did a good job, here.

[Marlena]

How beautiful, that must've been one powerful piece of music your friend composed to inspire something like this. Great work, my fave lines were "Beautiful tragedy in your sight, half the darkness, half the light." The entire poem in itself is wonderfully written, great work :3

[kewlbluetiger]

Wow what a powerful write. Today it snowed where I am so the poem has really special meaning. Love the detailed metaphor of the snowflake falling from grace and innocence. Second stanza is just awesome. Keep up the fantastic work!

[Voice]

This is very beautiful i really like it. Great flow and great write!!

Voice