At Last

A love poem I did for a class a whiles ago.

This is the story of a boy

who fell in love with a girl.

The boy was worthless,

or so he thought.

Everyday he was thrown into misery.

He pushed himself into doubt

believing that his life was lower

than those who pushed him.

His eyes for truth

were dark with self-inflicting sorrow.

 

Then he saw her,

Her whose beauty shined from within

like a star in the darkest sky,

Her whose smile glowed

like the pale moonlight on a serene pond,

Her whose eyes mesmerized him

like the vast horizon of a sunset,

Her whose kindness

was like that of a saint.

 

The very sight of her,

the very knowledge of her existence

Gave him a swirl of emotion,

a yearning, an ache in his heart

And yet

it filled him with an indescribable bliss.

 

She was beautiful and virtuous.

She saw him with eyes of kindness

when others wouldn't acknowledge him.

She had been waiting and searching

for someone to hold on to

and tell her, "I love you."

She believed her search was over.

 

Time passed and they were happy.

Things changed during that time:

The boy no longer believed that he was worthless.

She had become the light of his life,

with it he saw the truth;

he was not worthless.

The girl was no longer waiting.

She was content with the bliss she had found.

As long as he was there,

she would not want.

 

Everytime they looked into each other's eyes,

they knew, at last,

Their hearts had found a home.

Author's Note

One of my first poems

Reviews

[DiggeyEleven]

A good poem for being one of your first, has some lines that are full with great imagery and flow. My favorite being:

Her whose smile glowed
like the pale moonlight on a serene pond,
Her whose eyes mesmerized him
like the vast horizon of a sunset,
Her whose kindness
was like that of a saint.

Just work a bit on the flow, perhaps read it aloud to yourself and see if it has that cadence that can add so much to a poem.

[Rachel Knight]

This is quite nice for one of your first poems! I love the subject. It is one that many can relate to, which makes it an excellent choice. As Emily said, you should read around and expand your knowledge of the genre. This will give you new ideas and perspectives on poetry.

[Randal Bright]

Great love poem! It has a great story, that well, I even relate to personally. Not only is it terrible to let yourself get pushed around... I know that very well... It's absolutely wonderful to know that someone really loves you.

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

I love it, it ran so rhythmatically I could sense the excitement,
the search, and the love between two souls who found each other, great write, mishel

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

Thats a great poem. I ws on my friend Twilights page and I accidently click on your page and i check out your writting and its great

[BenightedWhispers]

Wow this was good. Are you sure you're not a poet? I loved how descritive it was and the potency of your words. Good job.

[.:Naiira Harlow:.]

It's beautiful. I wouldn't have known it was one of your first if you hadn't said anything. A sweet and loving poem indeed.
-Twilight

[Emily B]

It's beautiful. You are a poet. You may decide to read and expand your knowledge, but you have written a lovely poem.