War of Words

War of Words

A Poem by Sue
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The turn of phrase "Words can never hurt you" may be true in a physical aspect, but sometimes, words cut...deep. Maybe it's the soul, or the mind that takes the sting of verbal assault.

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I’ve been fighting you

For oh too long

Even if you beat me

I re-enter fight

Come back strong

Only for another defeat

To the other soldiers

I am strong

But nothing for your whole army

But War of Words

I’ll push on

Cause words can never hurt me…

© 2015 Sue


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Author's Note

Sue
Feel free to critique but please do not list things you do not like about the writing without telling me how I can improve. Thank you all :)

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When I first read this, I thought "This sounds really interesting...but, something's off about the timing." And then I thought for a second and it clicked - that's what makes it interesting. I would suggest adjusting the timing and making it more rhythmic, but that would make it lose some of it's integrity. I like the bulky timing because it brings into my mind how war really is, how an argument can be. There's no perfection, just calculated moves that hit or miss. I enjoyed the read, Sue. Kudos!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sue

7 Years Ago

Thanks! I thought about making it more rhythmic with a smoother flow, but you're right, the reason I.. read more



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war of words,sticks and stones break my bones but words wont hurt me
great theme

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sue

7 Years Ago

Thank you!
 wordman

7 Years Ago

you`re welcome,welcome to w/c
I think this poem was great. Words can hurt and sometimes we do need to get up and fight. We shouldn't have to take them laying down. Great job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sue

7 Years Ago

Thank you :) Though I like to pretend that words don't hurt, they do, but I have to fight them off :.. read more
When I first read this, I thought "This sounds really interesting...but, something's off about the timing." And then I thought for a second and it clicked - that's what makes it interesting. I would suggest adjusting the timing and making it more rhythmic, but that would make it lose some of it's integrity. I like the bulky timing because it brings into my mind how war really is, how an argument can be. There's no perfection, just calculated moves that hit or miss. I enjoyed the read, Sue. Kudos!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sue

7 Years Ago

Thanks! I thought about making it more rhythmic with a smoother flow, but you're right, the reason I.. read more

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Added on July 21, 2015
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