Force of the Blade

I press the blade to my skin,
I push, harder, harder,
Tears roll down my face,
I do not care,
I am just a disgrace.
Have you come to barter,
with me for my life?
Just take it,
there isn't a price.
I press the blade to my skin,
For all those times I was second,
When mother's patience wore thin,
and daddy began yelling,
For fight after fight,
I've lost almost all.
I press the blade to my skin,
I push, harder, harder,
too hard.

Author's Note

I really think the picture described perfectly how it feels (it's a gif. Not just a pic of 'don't cut')

Reviews

[Becky]

I like the way you wrote this, though the theme is somewhat overdone. The last two lines are especially powerful. And I agree with Abbie, please stop if you do. No one should ever have to feel like physical pain makes non-physical pain less painful. I'm sure other people have offered, but if you need someone to talk to, message me.

(That awkward moment when this isn't true?)

[Amanda]

I was just writing what I felt at that moment, which is how most of my writing is

[Carolann Dowsett]

So full of sadness, its horrible what this world sometimes brings us too. When our pain is so great that physical pain seems to be the only release. It's not the answer though, believe me, there are other ways to see yourself through the pain of your life. In the end hurting yourself like that only makes it worse. I love the way you wrote the poem though, you are a skilled poet, very deep and very real.

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Eeek o_e that was really painful...but in any words, I think we've all done it and really we just wonder why this method is used so often and why is it that it works, the alien pain helps...it really does, to get away from everything else. I like your poem cause it just dealt with the situation of cutting so nicely. Awesome job mama bear ^^

[Owlgirl]

Wow, the power in this is amazing. Great job, this is awesome writing.

[Rhea752]

hey this has a great theme and flow to it. very dramatic and powerful.

Amanda, my best friend cuts but before she does she always calls me or her other best friend and talks it out. most of the time when she's done she feels better and doesn't need to cut. try that. both me and Marble Mountain are here for you, and your other friends. i hope you didn't cut.

well done. keep writing!!! :D

[Abbie]

:( please don't tell me that you did this. Please? and if you do, please, stop. :( It's not good to cut yourself. I don't want to see you in pain. :(