Ocean Serenity

A poem about the ocean at night...in a sense

The wind blows softly,
Oh so sweet,
The sand is cool,
Against my weathered feet,
The silence surrounds me,
Right now it is night,
And by the time I am found,
You will see dawn’s early light.
Slowly I step forward,
My heart beating fast,
The water inches closer,
Anxious to meet me at last.
Has it known all this time,
That we will be one and the same?
Tonight I will die,
For the ocean isn’t tame.
It is angry and unforgiving,
On nights like these,
When people are broken,
And no one can they please.
So here I am,
With only the truth to face,
The water welcomes me,
And I sleep forever in it’s embrace.

Author's Note

Aside from my breakdown last night, everything is okay. I hope to write more and now that I'm in the best place for me, inspiration might strike.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

My goodness!! I'm thinking at first "How beautiful is this? It's personal, romantic, and deserved". Theeeeen you threw me for a loop and I am feeling like I can't ry HARD enough to pull you back from the inevitable end as you wash within the waves to disappear!! I felt like I lost a friend where worry and the meaning are not lost within this poem of yours. It's beautifully tragic and well-written, Manda Bear!! 'm glad I got to see you smile inside that pic of yours at the bottom of the poem. lol Very nice..... xoxo -Mark

[Nick.B]

Great poem full of emotions and you can actually feel the breathe of the ocean and the air...great job

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow this is amazing and you are amazing. Such a deep heart wrenching poem. I'm glad your ok. Love this.

[An owl on the moon]

What an enchanted darkness drifting across the waves... How I love the ocean... and miss her winds and wildness... You give such a wonder to her depth and delight... and her ability to wash over us in our times of need... So beautiful and bittersweet.... Peace, dear poet...

[Raghav Sharma]

very mature writing at such a young age,i enjoyed reading it.keep it up.

[Amanda]

Thanks :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

On the contrary, what you say will determine much of what I think of you. So choose carefully your words. I am a "visual" person, a trusting person too - for the most part. You invited me to this quiet place, where the wind is soft and sweet, where there is cool sand beneath my feet.. and in my mind's eye you stand there and separate into two different people. One that wants to jump into the sea and be lost to this savage world of misery and the other that desperately seeks to pull the other back. I wonder which is stronger? The latter, I hope.

[Twistedme]

I found this poem quite captivating, it's sad but I enjoyed it =F
A story I have heard to many times but nicely written this is.
Your situation is depressing but you gotta keep strong and fight, let the creativity ooze out keep this kind of writing (style that is) coming. You have a lot of creativeness in you and I look forward to reading what you post in the future :)

[Amanda]

Thanks dude (:

[Twistedme]

Pleasant travels to you my friend.

[Kenneth The Poet]

I know that feeling. Alone in your room, your loved ones far away, the weapon is nearby or the river is not far away. You describe that pain oh so well.

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Very vivid imagery. I hope you feel better.

[Amanda]

thanks dude

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You are very welcome. Thank you for the read request.

[Erin Thomas]

Just got back from the ocean, and no matter what you were thinking when you wrote this, you got it! This is so much like how I felt only a few days ago, it's kind of scary! Great work, your inspirations are working!!!

[Amanda]

thanks :)