Torn Veil

Torn Veil

A Poem by Dreamer

Sometimes the word 'Good'bye is so very inappropriate in the situation



Illusions and quintessential dreams,

Fairytales, always thought invading it seems


Intangible fingers formed by sheer will power,

Bearing gifts,

Embarked upon their journey from a mature mind to a naive heart.

Breaking down walls that, like the ones from Jericho, stood invincible until the gifts of the mind; common sense and rationality, were blasted from ancient horns.

See what is really there.


Lift the veil.

Move pass the words engineered for flattery.

Hear the actual emptiness.


Take a single step forward,

Letting the cloak of pretense,

Threaded with denial,

Beaded with those illusions, dreams and fairytale ideas,

Hit the floor.

More bare than the waste land that is your word.

- disillusoned.


Standing before me- once upon a time,

Covered in the dust,

Of journeys travelled in your life.

Sparring the pusillanimity of my nature,

Brushing the dust, off your face.

Secretly parched from my own roads that I have taken.


I was spinning my own illusions,

From the temporary golden thread that spewed from your lips,


The well ran dry.

Now I'm watching those beautiful words evaporate,

Knowing that you will soon evaporate in the sun.



Had you removed your hands from my eyes,

The sight of approaching darkness may have caused me to flee

Only time would have told

But at this hour I have heard all that I need.

So I humbly reclaim my dismantled heart,

I'll coat my spine with steel,

Setting you free...


Silhouette riding off in the distance

I will not fight this need to cry,

Mouth full of razors,

I whisper to you...




© 2011 Dreamer

Author's Note

I did a few changes based on the advice i was given :)

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Silhouette riding off in the distance
I will not fight this need to cry,
Mouth full of razors,
I whisper to you...


I love the last stanza..excellent way to conclude this poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago

it really is beautifull..

your imagery is big!:D
like it !

Posted 9 Years Ago

I love the last stanzas.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Wow, amazing. I loved reading this. It was so vivid and beautiful. The poem was so captivating and led me into a journey. Great Job, best one yet!

Posted 9 Years Ago

great biblical allusions and references, which highlight the intense imagery you have crafted here. The message in this is strong and direct,yet still poetic and subtle. One minor typo - you have "acient" instead of "ancient" in the first stanza. But you move from the general to the specific with such clarity it's breath-taking. Well written indeed!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Beautiful, the feelings are so poignant and tangible in this.

Posted 9 Years Ago

I really liked the title, its not a title you would expect. The poem was great it had a lot of imagery. Well done.
♥ Ta'Shandra

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on August 5, 2011
Last Updated on December 6, 2011



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