Love At First Sight!

This HEART cry your name, and never forget the same!!

Summer Rains and Winter Heat

You are the reason I Breathe..

You are the Song in the car..

I keep singing , so far…

 

Your hands are tied,

Entangled in mine…

Streets are cold, we walk and walk

And talk these talks and talk some more….

 

You have Everything,

I cannot live without…

You are the dying man’s last words,

I cannot smile without!

 

In your arms i forget to Woe..

On your lap my Lids get close….

And your uptight Stare,

Ahh! I can see through my Hair..:)

 

You are broken Heart’s band-aid..

I am your Moth drawn to the flame…

You are my Line of Sight..

You are my LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT!! J

Reviews

[gombeggar]

some real good lines here...drop all the colors though...just a thought

[Hiral]

superb!!! you write teenage love which is innocent and has its own blossom...Very Well written

[Ency Bearis]

Beautiful poem of infatuation .... you are broken heart's band - aid, nice idea - a metaphor. Great write.

[Deuces]

Loved this. You share all your inner thoughts and reveal all to the one you desire.

Love at first sight is a true and real occurrence. You've conveyed that perfectly.

[Shivam Murari]

The beginning itself shows how the itself sets the atmosphere of love at first site. Its entertaining , cute, adorable and mushy. :)

[Mike Emil]

too many colors
are you typing in crayon
i think NOT!!!

[Holly Mason]

sweet words of first sight loves
nice word smile penned very nicely
thank you for sharing

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Great metaphor of love!

I like the rhythm and the rhyme...and of course the content about your love at first sight.

Great job! :)

[Surbhi Khandelwal]

Thanks for such a thoughtful comment and read...deeply appreciated...

[Souladareatease]

Ahhhh sweet colourful love...You penned it perfect-write on!!!

[Surbhi Khandelwal]

ohh...thanks for the adoring review...:)

[smilempsn]

nice... :)
every word is fulled with some cute feelings...

[Surbhi Khandelwal]

Thanks for stopping and sharing your views :)

[smilempsn]

It was my pleasure :)