Love At First Sight!

Love At First Sight!

A Poem by Surbhi Khandelwal

This HEART cry your name, and never forget the same!!


Summer Rains and Winter Heat

You are the reason I Breathe..

You are the Song in the car..

I keep singing , so far…


Your hands are tied,

Entangled in mine…

Streets are cold, we walk and walk

And talk these talks and talk some more….


You have Everything,

I cannot live without…

You are the dying man’s last words,

I cannot smile without!


In your arms i forget to Woe..

On your lap my Lids get close….

And your uptight Stare,

Ahh! I can see through my Hair..:)


You are broken Heart’s band-aid..

I am your Moth drawn to the flame

You are my Line of Sight..


© 2013 Surbhi Khandelwal

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some real good lines here...drop all the colors though...just a thought

Posted 9 Years Ago

superb!!! you write teenage love which is innocent and has its own blossom...Very Well written

Posted 9 Years Ago

Beautiful poem of infatuation .... you are broken heart's band - aid, nice idea - a metaphor. Great write.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Loved this. You share all your inner thoughts and reveal all to the one you desire.

Love at first sight is a true and real occurrence. You've conveyed that perfectly.

Posted 9 Years Ago

The beginning itself shows how the itself sets the atmosphere of love at first site. Its entertaining , cute, adorable and mushy. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

too many colors
are you typing in crayon
i think NOT!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago

sweet words of first sight loves
nice word smile penned very nicely
thank you for sharing

Posted 9 Years Ago

Great metaphor of love!

I like the rhythm and the rhyme...and of course the content about your love at first sight.

Great job! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

Surbhi Khandelwal

9 Years Ago

Thanks for such a thoughtful comment and read...deeply appreciated...
Ahhhh sweet colourful love...You penned it perfect-write on!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Surbhi Khandelwal

9 Years Ago

ohh...thanks for the adoring review...:)
nice... :)
every word is fulled with some cute feelings...

Posted 9 Years Ago

Surbhi Khandelwal

9 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping and sharing your views :)

9 Years Ago

It was my pleasure :)

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41 Reviews
Shelved in 4 Libraries
Added on April 24, 2013
Last Updated on April 24, 2013
Tags: rain, song, heart, love, woe, hair, stare, sight, lids, lap, arms


Surbhi Khandelwal
Surbhi Khandelwal

jaipur, rajasthan, India

umm, i cant help myself...spilling on pages...when thoughts block my mind...the more i write..the more i think...and more i smile..:) more..


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