08-01-15

quick something

The smell of her kiss just left my lips,

I can't be stressed with her,

As soon as were apart,

I obsess for her,

Author's Note

I have never smoked a cigarette but tried to compare it to this feeling. Just tried to capture the feeling of wanting to be with a girl even though I had just left her house. She is my addiction.

Reviews

[Gabby Nieves]

damn, i feel this one so hard. Short but says so much more and reading this gave me a pain in my chest because I know that feeling oh so well. It's beautiful really, and amazing.. but strangly painful..? To want and yearn for another human like that. haha It's sick, don't you just love it? Awesome little piece.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thanks a lot, I appreciate it!!! :)

[Pikachu]

I like it because from a scientific stand point, love is an addiction. It's a chemical imbalance in the brain that gives one a similar feeling as that of taking a drag of a cigarette. It's a short but powerful piece. Well done.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you so much!!!

[Emily]

Very nice poem!!
Keep it up!

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you!!

[Shae]

There's nothing like being addicted to a person. Amazing yet tragic in a way. Thank you for sharing :-)

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed

[Coyote Poetry]

The kiss. Lead us to tempting and dangerous ground. I like the way you described the kiss. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thanks! I appreciate it Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I remember driving away from my then boy friends, now husbands house and feeling empty like i was leaving my soul with him. I feel this. Simple and profound

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thats a great way to describe the feeling. Thank you!

[jeannemarie coulter]

love the first line and understand the need...would read better if you used we're in the third line...

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Yeah ooops :| Thank you though!!

[Ana B.]

Will her flavor be different, the next time you'll see her? Lovely words dear author.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

It only gets better, thanks :)

[Sultrysoul]

I've been there the obsession is insanity. Getting them out your system is excruciating. Great piece

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Very crazy, thank you!!!

[Sultrysoul]

You are welcome :)

[Bear]

Interesting idea, the comparison of obsession verses addiction. I really like this concept but there just isn't enough of this good thing, I would love to see you build on this and explore deeper into your emotions. Thank you for inviting me to read this, I look forward to reading more of your work.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you, I will be doing a longer version for sure. Please read and review my writing, you are always welcome and your input is much appreciated.