As The Sun Goes Down

Does the sun compete with the stars?

      while the moon covets from afar

Is the morning jealous of the night?

      as it yearns for moonlight~

Until the evenings rendezvous

       stealing a moment till adieu,

Although parting is sweet sorrow

      they long again for tomorrow~

 

When the heartbeat of temptation

      hides in shadows of disguise,

The brazing sun goes down

      and moon and stars arise~

They share the seabed of the ocean

      Ménage à trois of devotion~

 

©SyberRose

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Oooh lala, I love this one Rose!

They share the seabed of the ocean
Ménage à trois of devotion~

Sweet finish!

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Frieda....i'm happy you enjoyed it and thanks for peeking in this evening:)

[Angi]

Rose, this one is so playful. The sun and moon and stars see each other in passing. I can see them longing from afar, through the blue glass water. Lovely! Angi~

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Angi and nice to see you tonight too...hugs

[B-poet]

A marvelous eloquent masterpiece. Loved it from start to finish! Great work SyberRose. I'm adding this one to my library. :)

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much BP...and nice to hear from you tonight also...Rose:)

[Ravyne Hawke]

this is so beautifully written, Rose. I love the personification, the questioning, and especially the last two lines.. awesome!

[SyberRose]

Thank you Lori...I do appreciate your kind words and visit today...glad you enjoyed:)

[Vikrantsingh]

We Rose - 1st of all nice hair style (color) and great smile on your profile picture. Coming to this poem, this is lovely interaction between night and day... night is jealous of day and visa versa.. Very great and magnificent work to express you work on this poem :)
Loved it :)
- Singh :)

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much for those nice compliments and i like your new photo too...i always appreciate your visits Singh...:)

[Vikrantsingh]

I'm pleased ;) thanks you :P

[Cassie]

That photo is soothing and the poem..well you penned it right, has great imagery and this goes to my library. thank you for the RR

[SyberRose]

thank you Cassie and good seeing you this morning dear...hugss...yes I loved the photo too.

[Rita L. Sev]

Love these images - the competition among the sky's bodies... great personification.

They share the seabed of the ocean
Ménage à trois of devotion

LOVE this closing line - great piece, Rose!

I like the new pic! :)

[SyberRose]

Thank you very much Rita...nice to see you tonight...Rose:)

[ANTO]

You are highly underrated Rose and I'm sure destined for greater things
This is sad poem yet philosophical
The image you chose - exudes turbulent calmness
Bravo
X

[SyberRose]

Thank you Anthony...i'm glad you enjoyed it...:)

[Sami Khalil]

Poetic beauty mixed with great imagery and soothing cadence...Bravo

[SyberRose]

thank you so much Sami and hope you are having a lovely day so far.:)

[Sami Khalil]

I'm . I hope you do the same...Take care...:)

[Traci]

Such a beautiful write, Rose.

"When the heartbeat of temptation

hides in shadows of disguise,

The brazing sun goes down

and moon and stars arise~"

There is so much beauty and wonderment in the sun, moon and stars. Your words have painted a lovely picture of this true devotion to one another. Well done, my friend, another favorite.

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Traci...and so glad you enjoyed this piece...Rose:)

[Traci]

Always my pleasure, Rose.