Neon Lights

i promise im not suicidal. haha

Blinking bright

Losing sight

I'm running away

To the neon lights

Take me to the place

No hurt

No pain

As the blood pulses from my vains

Eyelids fluttering

Breaths sputtering

Blinking bright

Losing sight

I'm running away

To the neon lights

Author's Note

constructive critism plz.

Reviews

[Keriun]

I don't feel anything about this poem, like, nothing impressed me at all.

"As the blood pulses from my vEins*"

heheh

[D Hughes]

simple and short i like how you brought in the tittle in the poem
great work

[Bud]

I liked the poem, but the font needs to be a little bit larger. Keep up the good work.

[snapstache]

like i txted u its not ur best... only one error its veins not vains...
I like when poems end with the fisrts part and last part r the same, but the poem was too short for it to work. Maybe you should lengthen it...idk not good a constructive critism