Alone

The narrator tries to convince his friend to stop texting and talk to him for once.

"Dude, what was that?"

I say to my bro,

"I think it was a hat."

He doesn't notice, though

His eyes are glued

To a tiny screen, 

With an attitude

And a tone rather mean

He says,

"Dude, no one cares

You see I'm busy."

And then with that, he stares

It's making me dizzy

Dizzy with rage,

You see, I'm quite mad

It's like he's in a cage

Trapped, looking at an ad

"Get off your phone,"

I say with a glare

"I fell like I'm alone,

Even though you're right there."

"What're you saying?

I'm here, bro, for you

Do you think I'm playing?"

He says, looking quite blue

He's next to me

Yet not really there

His mind happens to be

Occupied, somewhere

His messages send

The texts, he receives

Making our talking end,

And so, I take me leave

Author's Note

This is supposed to be about how people are stuck in their phones and ignore the people around them .-.

Reviews

[V]

Interesting piece of writing. I felt irony in there, though I abs understand what it's about.;) I like modern writings as this one, though I felt (just a little) that you kind of broke the rhythm in some lines from time to time...nevertheless it was quite entertaining to read.

[NightWatch]

Poetry's definitely my weakness, so it doesn't surprise me that I broke the rhythm lol. I'll work on that! XDD
Thanks for reviewing, I really appreciate it!

[V]

You're welcome. Though I don't think it's you're weak at it, you did well.

[TwoDaysTooLate]

Wow! I really liked this poem, and it touches upon a topic that not many people would dare to go anywhere near. I loved the rhyme scheme, and it felt right when read out loud. Also, the fact that you use 'dude' and 'bro' makes it more down to earth rather than 'IT'S A POEM!' which I really enjoyed :)

[NightWatch]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! I was hoping that the "dude" and the "bro" would stand out in a positive way XDD
I tried really hard to make sure the rhythm was the same in each stanza, but I personally feel like it makes some of it awkward to read. If you think it's good, though, then I guess I did a good job then!
Thanks a bunch for reviewing! It means a lot to me :)