Alone

Alone

A Poem by NightWatch
"

The narrator tries to convince his friend to stop texting and talk to him for once.

"
"Dude, what was that?"
I say to my bro,
"I think it was a hat."
He doesn't notice, though
His eyes are glued
To a tiny screen, 
With an attitude
And a tone rather mean
He says,
"Dude, no one cares
You see I'm busy."
And then with that, he stares
It's making me dizzy
Dizzy with rage,
You see, I'm quite mad
It's like he's in a cage
Trapped, looking at an ad
"Get off your phone,"
I say with a glare
"I fell like I'm alone,
Even though you're right there."
"What're you saying?
I'm here, bro, for you
Do you think I'm playing?"
He says, looking quite blue
He's next to me
Yet not really there
His mind happens to be
Occupied, somewhere
His messages send
The texts, he receives
Making our talking end,
And so, I take me leave

© 2015 NightWatch


Author's Note

NightWatch
This is supposed to be about how people are stuck in their phones and ignore the people around them .-.

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Interesting piece of writing. I felt irony in there, though I abs understand what it's about.;) I like modern writings as this one, though I felt (just a little) that you kind of broke the rhythm in some lines from time to time...nevertheless it was quite entertaining to read.

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6 Years Ago

Poetry's definitely my weakness, so it doesn't surprise me that I broke the rhythm lol. I'll work on.. read more
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6 Years Ago

You're welcome. Though I don't think it's you're weak at it, you did well.



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Wow! I really liked this poem, and it touches upon a topic that not many people would dare to go anywhere near. I loved the rhyme scheme, and it felt right when read out loud. Also, the fact that you use 'dude' and 'bro' makes it more down to earth rather than 'IT'S A POEM!' which I really enjoyed :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


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NightWatch

6 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it! I was hoping that the "dude" and the "bro" would stand out in a positive wa.. read more
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Interesting piece of writing. I felt irony in there, though I abs understand what it's about.;) I like modern writings as this one, though I felt (just a little) that you kind of broke the rhythm in some lines from time to time...nevertheless it was quite entertaining to read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

NightWatch

6 Years Ago

Poetry's definitely my weakness, so it doesn't surprise me that I broke the rhythm lol. I'll work on.. read more
V

6 Years Ago

You're welcome. Though I don't think it's you're weak at it, you did well.

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