Feebleness

I am an old and feeble man
But I have the experience
That is farther than any youngsters
I was hilarious to the things
That I have done in the past
For now I am old and feeble man

Time will never come back
So now I am sitting
Sitting in my rocking chair
As memories is just a smog
As I am smoking with the pipe

I once conquered the world
Conquered them with my talents
But now I am an old and feeble man
As amnesia amputates my talents
I am just a bird
A bird who lost its apt to fly

There were times when I was in joy
And times when I was in rue
But time has snatched away
Beyond the scope of my touch
A cycle of being in every human

I have become as weak as an infant
As I am preparing for a new rove
I take no possession in this journey
As feeble man turns into a young soul
And St Peter opens the heaven's door

I walked in saying "Amen Amen Amen"

Author's Note

Hope you like my poem and enjoy your read.

Reviews

[Moonie]

Very well written, Terrence. There is such clarity and perfection in your writing. You always choose the vividest words to say what you want. Many excellent lines in here... my favourite ones:
"As amnesia amputates my talents " .
You couldn't have chosen a better way to end it. Love love love the end... :))

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much moon for your kind review towards my poem

[ANTO]

There are so many Wow! lines here Terrence.
...Memories just a smog
...amnesia amputates my talents
...time when i was in rue
...feeble man turns into a young soul

Fantastic telling of the twilight of life.
:)

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Anto for your kind review.

[Emily]

Lovely wording!
Well done!!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo very much Emily

[Confuser]

Thought it was great Chang: the transition from youth to adult slips away, sometimes with many regrets, No? He sounds to be a fractured person wishing to stay young, afraid to transition into his new life, but as I believe, everything begins anew. Great work. Thank you very much. Dale

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Dale for giving me such an amazing insight that I didn't realize. I loved your review.

[Confuser]

You're welcome! I love your writing. Smart...

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Dale

[Confuser]

Y/W.....:::Dale

[armin]

This is well written nope, I think very well written. The meaning is strong.

I once conquered the world
Conquered them with my talents
But now I am an old and feeble man
As amnesia amputates my talents
I am just a bird
A bird who lost its apt to fly

You are still talented sir, you know someone has said very truly that anyone can achieve 'anything' in life just requires some efforts and determination. Even a feeble can be the strong.

armin. ...

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Armin for your kind and generous review. I am quite honoured by your review.

[Jamestown]

Life will most definitely take it's toll on a person
especially a person's body, but I pray before the
body starts to plummet that the soul has found
it's peace with God and is headed to heaven for
a tune up:) Really enjoyed this piece, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much James for your wise words

[wordman]

this is a great write Terrence and this is exactly what happens

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Wordman

[wordman]

you are welcome

[Karen Arizona]

This poem, in my opinion, isn't just about being "old and feeble," it's about growing older and finding wisdom. Thanks for sharing!

[Terrence Chang]

Dust you are and dust shall you return. An old man becomes feeble in exchange of being wiser. An interesting thought Karen. Thank you soo much for your generous review.

[Ana B.]

A deep meaning in this one....made me muse for a while.....eh, this time....what to do with it....what to do without it.....lovely write :)

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Ana. Well everyone has to go old provided there is no abrupt goodbye. We have to give away one day. So live to the fullest and leave the rest to the pest

[Ana B.]

A clean break is the best break i guess....anytime my friend :)

[Terrence Chang]

Even I guess so but who knows what breaks.

[Ana B.]

ha ha, true indeed.

[Terrence Chang]

By the way I always wanted to ask. What is your profession. Cause you don't write like an average person. My sincere apologies if I said something wrong

[Ana B.]

:D I am a master degree student in Global Trade....no apologies needed.