Haiku for the Angels

Haiku for the Angels

A Poem by Aurora Dawn
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This is my first haiku ever so take it easy :3 haha

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Heaven and Hell panic
Dust specks gather, sand grains fall
Lost, broken angels

© 2012 Aurora Dawn


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i like it !
simple and perfect


Posted 6 Years Ago


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are you takling about angles or angels...either way it fits well...and for the haiku stuff Crowbar is right... But then again its your firs try...Your doing great already...
Keep it up...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aurora Dawn

11 Years Ago

Thankyou,
I am trying to decide if haikus are really my "thing"
I appreciate the review.. read more
I am almost certain that the syllable pattern for a haiku is 5, 7, 5. You've got 6, 7, 5. And if you mean "angels" instead of "angles," it's beautiful. ^_^

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aurora Dawn

11 Years Ago

Haha yes, thankyou for pointing out my mistakes.
This is my first haiku after all :3
Crowbar

11 Years Ago

I'm sure your next one will be perfect :)
Aurora Dawn

11 Years Ago

I hope so :3

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Added on October 15, 2012
Last Updated on October 15, 2012
Tags: dust, sand, broken, angles, hell, Heaven, haiku

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Aurora Dawn
Aurora Dawn

Boise, ID



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Hi. I'm Aurora. I just kinda write about anything at any time. If I have an idea I write it down and soon it blossoms. I like writing poetry and short stories mainly. Veni. Vidi. Vici. more..

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