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I'M GONE  BY T. PINA

I'M GONE BY T. PINA

A Poem by PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALIFORNIA
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A REALEATIONSHIP SPAWN IN HELL IS FINALLY OVER!

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I’m Gone

 

 

We will never find forgiveness
in this house that we sometimes share
we emptied out our souls and pockets
on whatever that was there
Sad to say

there was never any real love here and no one really cared
what's done is done
Now that our home is completely bare
after today I hope you realize,

I’m gone

Blessings sometimes have thorns, and misery loves company
we can never repair the mess that we have made

since we can’t use our hands to hide the sun

It’s dam clear our life reeks of all the wrongs we have done

After today, you gotta know,

I’m gone


I've spent too many years at war with myself
my psychologist told me all this bullshit is just not good for my health
If I'm going to live in misery in this life
then I rather do it by myself and with out all this dam fuc#ing strife!

It's over,

I’m gone

 

 

© 2008 PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALIFORNIA


Author's Note

PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALIFORNIA
A POEM WRITTEN TO KISS MY OLD MISERY GOOD BYE!

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First of all I love the whole flow of this piece...smooth;
and the feel of frustration and determination is so vivid
that the reader can feel it...really like that!

Lastly I quoted the 2 lines below because they are poignant
and give so much impact to this piece...just awesome lines!

"Blessings sometimes have thorns,"
"And we can't use our hands to hide the sun"
Awesome lines!

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Well a good thing at that to finally feel free! I loved this piece not just because of how the flow was nice, it was more than that. It was... Emphatic? I think thats the word :P You strike out with your readers, I felt the frustration and the finality of it. Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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pal
Life is just an experience for soul to reflect and move on. Though its good to look back on the path of the soul

Nice poem indeed

pal

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow thats wonderful. Glad you could overcome something like that. Good write [:

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very powerful an emotional piece, very well written.
Laceyjane

Posted 12 Years Ago


WOW!!
I must say this was a very emotional read!
very deep and struck a thorn in my heart for you
fact or fiction, it hit a nerve...

great job.. great!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I was almost positive that I had reviewed this before when I dropped in on you tonight, but I had to read it again anyway. I hope your life has now found a way to being happy. This was wonderful the first time I read it and it is wonderful as I close it again tonight.

Hugs,
Lesa

Posted 12 Years Ago


You refelcted the pain of change in a great way.
Nice format, and pic choice.

A.M.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice stuff i loved the way you concluded your ideas!! good job:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I felt every word of your poem. I mean this is great. Isn't it wonderful how you can heal through writing? It changes everything. I'm so very happy that you have gottten rid of your old misery. The best of luck.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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JC
Very powerful!

Using the empty home to describe an empty relationship, wondering why one would exist there at all. The meter was excellant and I liked the sharp edge you gave the piece.

Kudos, thanks for the invite, I'm sorry it took so long to get back to you!

JC

Posted 12 Years Ago



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PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALIFORNIA

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Born T. Pina on Feb. 13, 1960 in the South Bronx, New York City. Writing is truly the passion of my soul. The soul is that energy that keeps us alive and connected to the Universe. It is the most.. more..

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