Bottle Minds

Bottle Minds

A Poem by ROXANE DORSEY

Living mentally in a bottle.
I must shatter the walls or
life will stall. In this glass
lies my past. Presently I'll
build up waste & gas to get
the needed blast. Screw the
cork loose with ease.  For I 
can take the easy way out, 
straight up no cuts or gusts
to waste.

© 2017 ROXANE DORSEY


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This was good very good. I like how you described how you would escape and how you must break down the walls.

Posted 2 Months Ago


No wasted words in the poetry. I liked the directness and the realistic thoughts in the poetry. Thank you Roxane for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Gorgeously Stimulating

Great Read

Matthew

Posted 1 Year Ago


I am loving your style, Roxane... I definitely am a fan of it in my own work... We are just great minds that think alike! Haha... No cuts or gusts to waste! Blastingly penned...

Posted 1 Year Ago


ROXANE DORSEY

1 Year Ago

I am glad to hear I have least one fan. thanks for the kind review.
Silente-Write

1 Year Ago

Def' more than one fan...! You are welcome
very well pointed.
a lot of people are living mentally into a bottle.
the expectation of how who we are(in our mind and how we should be )and than there is also the real part of how we are.
prison of the past that can't be changed or the future that is always unknown.
freeing our self with the present.

I really liked this one, this is the way I felt while reading this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


ROXANE DORSEY

1 Year Ago

glad you can read in between the lines. thanks for the kind review.
Very beautiful poem, clear, and factual.

"Living mentally in a bottle." is what happens to most people. sadly, even the young ones. Even going on diet is like bottled medication.

Posted 1 Year Ago


ROXANE DORSEY

1 Year Ago

thanks very kindly for your review.
reads a little ominous to me ..perhaps a contemplated suicide ... and a mind dependent on medication maybe .. i read it three times and get new ideas each time but each time this line
"build up waste & gas to get
the needed blast." has such a shock and real to the streets effect on me ... even just the title .. how many of us live in them ... closed off tight .. not trusting, uncompromising ... your poem has really got me thinking this morning ..
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


ROXANE DORSEY

1 Year Ago

thanks for the review. its great./ pressure(waste,gas)
Indeed, it can get claustrophobic in the bottle. Better a timely release than a blast!

Posted 1 Year Ago


ROXANE DORSEY

1 Year Ago

thanks for the review and kind words.
The walls are closing fast and anxiety kicks in because the fear of the cycle continuing is awful. You want to live like others and be free but sometimes our mind finds a way to reel us back in. But then one day something happens. Something amazing and that tears down the wall. It'll happen. Thanks for sharing this. It got the juices going. Plenty for though. Nice work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


ROXANE DORSEY

1 Year Ago

thanks for the kind review.
duff

1 Year Ago

You got it.
Wow so on-point Roxane! We live in glass bottles, such fragile yet strong prisons. Our past chains us. Love the form , imagery and great rhyme pattern of this deft poem. Only way out is “straight up “- yes! Brava!

Posted 1 Year Ago


ROXANE DORSEY

1 Year Ago

thanks for review my poetry.

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ROXANE DORSEY
ROXANE DORSEY

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love poetry since it has been embedded in my mind deeply way back when I was 4 years old. A very good reader in pre-school. Nursery rhymes tuned me in even deeper. more..

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