Grey-Sky Lullaby

I was asked to write a song for a wedding. Here the resulting lyrics.

 

I'll try this on with you

I'll write a song for you

Lay out this quilt on a hill

Listen for the birds as they

Sing that pretty story of

A girl who found a love that was real

It's ok, It's ok.

 

You'll put on that pretty dress

The one the crowd will like the best

White dress you'll only wear for a day

Then we'll see our families

You're smiling as you walk with me

The sky will watch the doves fly away

It's our day, It's our day

 

Oh, oh falling in love from the start

Oh, but now that I know who you are

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for a star,

I love you so

 

Oh, oh, falling in love from the start,

Oh, but now that I know your whole heart

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for the stars,

I need you so...

Author's Note

I know the last two stanzas are almost identical, i just included both because one is sung softley, and one is belted at full volume. I didn't want to include only one because I didn't want the song to be too short.

Reviews

[SamBug]

Oh, oh, falling in love from the start,

Oh, but now that I know your whole heart

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for the stars,

I need you so...

This is the sweetest lines I have ever heard. It was the best part of this whole poem. You're an amazing writer. please don't ever stop!!!!

[Addie]

This is so gorgeous. I love it. These lyrics are perfect for a song. It's lovely =D

[New]

Well, I think the lyrics are perfect! I would love to have someone sing that at my wedding =-) It flows so smoothly. I really like the last stanza- it's beautiful all the way around! Great work. You should get a standing ovation!

[Wicahpi]

Why is it called "Grey-Sky Lullaby" with no mention of a gray sky
and you wouldn't want there to be on a wedding day?!

"I wouldn't trade you for the stars" is an awesome line and
I enjoy the doves ... symbolic of weddings.

I can imagine a beautiful handmade wedding quilt ...
Tradition in some cultures; one I adore, but never learned to do.

It's a happy lyric :)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I think your grey-sky lullaby is more like a blue-sky breeze warmly whispering through the soul. The words are soft and gentle - at once, romantic and sweet. As beautiful as it is to read, I'm certain it's a thousandfold when heard with music.

Linda Marie

[emily joe]

This is awesome! And yet again, Mr. Kent has written a heart throbbing love song. :D

[Laura]

Okay, so this is very cool. I really love how much emotion I feel illuminating out of your words.
"Oh, oh falling in love from the start
Oh, but now that I know who you are
I love you more
Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know
I wouldn't trade you for a star,
I love you so"
I think that this was my favorite part because it shows that heavy emotion of loving someone, so many people can relate to those feelings and I think that that makes your song even greater. It was a very sweet song and I love how you mentioned that you wouldn't trade that person for the stars, there's a deep, deep, deep sense of love and caring. I like it. Wonderful job : )

[Clarisse Nanoit]

too gorgeous! I love this; it's so sweet. Great rhythm and rhyme and all that jazz. Very nice piece. =) I have a friend who will love this. Great work.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

wow this is just Lovely that was our theam for my husbands and myselfs wedding was white doves and Bubbles lol.. the white doves symbal of the Holy spirit and or the holy spirit desending from jesus when he was Baptised they are peace such a beautiful touch to this very sweet and innocent i love this nice work

i have did poems for weddings also and anniversary poems for others mostly for ones in the family you just gave me a idea i been having to take a break from writing not feeling well my mind and spirit but i will bounce back fast i never get sick :) thank you for sharing god bless