Pleasing Poison

Pleasing Poison

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Furling a piece of foil
into a hollow little roll
he puffs pleasing poison;
sleeps isolated from realism
There are pipe dreams in his eyes,
brightens when twilight disappears
His comatose brain films radiant reveries
at night, within his mind’s stilled senses
Ordeals of failure constrained him to shut
the shop of sterling virtues residing in his heart
Switched it to exhibition of aggressive notions;
inaugurated bad blood between him and life
When he finds no pleasing poison,
lacerating arms calms him down
Thirst and hunger abandoned
He’s a spectacular skeleton
in loneliness’s grave
  sans elation

© 2018 ¿


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I really enjoyed reading this, I was a heroin addict, started with smoking it in cigarettes, then chasing the dragon and then injecting it, fortunately listened to the voice of reason and quit a couple of years ago, this poem really captures all that really well, pleasing poison indeed, you really start losing it in quite a short amount of time, try to quit but it's just too difficult to quit and stay off it for good, lacerating arms and all, I've been there, haha, withdrawal is the worst, nothing calms you down, too tired to walk, painful to sit, can't sleep, eat nothing, until the next fix, glad I got off it, anyway, I'm rambling, this is well written.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

¿

3 Years Ago

These scenes are so familiar to me and all that you said are totally understood. I find a little bab.. read more



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Visually these lines make the shape of an Iron bomb, such as those which descend from Jets onto cities. literally addiction destroys but metaphorically it is exactly like having a huge chunk of steel weighing on your shoulders and mind every second! So whatever poison that can lift this unbearable weight is definitely a pleasing poison. Imagine not being addicted and consuming some poison of choice! emit the chains, overcome the compulsions of the ego, seek independency of spirit rather than dependency of body, then it is purely inspiring to subject your mind to any poison for a change :) I loved this poem! thank you for sharing...

Posted 3 Years Ago


¿

3 Years Ago

Addiction to me is a mirror that shows multiple views if kept in different thoughts, there are demer.. read more
I noticed two double meanings in this poem, whether or not intentional.

You meantion "pipe dreams" this could be considered something wanted yet unattainable, or, dreaming of smoking a pipe. It goes well with the theme of addiction.

Then there is "bad blood" which could mean a bad relationship, or, injected drugs in the bloodstream. These two double meanings in your poem take what I'd say is a great poem, and improve on it even more. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 3 Years Ago


¿

3 Years Ago

Of course you're both way right RJ.
Bad blood is created by addiction between a life and it's.. read more
Whether it be crack, smack or meth, it is kinda hard to understand why so many people don't know it can be quite moreish and should be left well alone.... Says the guy who smokes weed... Just for medicinal reasons of course 😀

Posted 3 Years Ago


Missed the beauty of the shape for one year.Created a perfect spectacular design without compromising the message on addiction.I am really fond of playing with shapes.Also enjoyed similar shapes with mathematical problems in early books.Finally can't resist the temptation of sharing the famous song of Tagore on the confession about taking poison.It is here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B3O8rlXVpJU


আমি, জেনে শুনে বিষ করেছি পান।
কবিগুরু রবীন্দ্রনাথ ঠাকুর

আমি, জেনে শুনে বিষ করেছি পান।
প্রাণের আশা ছেড়ে সঁপেছি প্রাণ।

যতই দেখি তারে ততই দহি,

আপন মনোজ্বা�™া নীরবে সহি,

তবু পারি নে দূরে যেতে, মরিতে আসি,

�™ই গো বুক পেতে অন�™-বাণ।

যতই হাসি দিয়ে দহন করে,

ততই বাড়ে তৃষা প্রেমের তরে,

প্রেম-অমৃত-ধারা ততই যাচি,

যতই করে প্রাণে অশনি দান।

Posted 3 Years Ago


zainul

3 Years Ago

ঘুমাতে যাবার জন্য কম্পিউটার বন্ধ করা�.. read more
¿

3 Years Ago

আমীন.......
zainul

3 Years Ago

আমীন.......
I really enjoyed reading this, I was a heroin addict, started with smoking it in cigarettes, then chasing the dragon and then injecting it, fortunately listened to the voice of reason and quit a couple of years ago, this poem really captures all that really well, pleasing poison indeed, you really start losing it in quite a short amount of time, try to quit but it's just too difficult to quit and stay off it for good, lacerating arms and all, I've been there, haha, withdrawal is the worst, nothing calms you down, too tired to walk, painful to sit, can't sleep, eat nothing, until the next fix, glad I got off it, anyway, I'm rambling, this is well written.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

¿

3 Years Ago

These scenes are so familiar to me and all that you said are totally understood. I find a little bab.. read more
There is a fellow that we pass most everyday
for years his brain was laid away
miserable and unfriendly
a real dud
then he started smoking it in a pipe
and it made his attitude very bright
now he's a fairly pleasant sight
that drugs seem to have made alright

you form/layout is impressive (including poem)
that must have taken some brain squeezing to create
great write

Posted 4 Years Ago


¿

4 Years Ago

Yes Dave! The pleasure he searched, we failed to provide him and he found that in drugs. Squeezed a .. read more
Hey hey hey....Now wait a minute! I swear you didn't know me in 2018 when you wrote this!! Now how did you write this poem so beautifully on me! You hit the bulls eye Tahsin! Hhaha!

On a more serious note, great, impressive vocab once again!

Ordeals of failure constrained him to shut
the shop of sterling virtues residing in his heart

Tis just fantastic, my friend. You seem like a diamond that with a bit of cutting here and there could just dazzle the world. Write on! We need more such poetry!

Posted 4 Years Ago


¿

4 Years Ago

Believe me I did wrote this on a person I know, he finds these pleasing poisons keeping him alive, a.. read more
¿

4 Years Ago

Write** 😆geezzz
AJNJ

4 Years Ago

I always enjoy your poetry :)
Drugs are inimical to life and unfortunately younger ones don't get it. Great write.

Posted 4 Years Ago


¿

4 Years Ago

Undeniable true said, John. Thanks so much for your visit :)
Very thought-provoking! Sometimes in our darkest moments in life we reflect on what brought us there and what we had planned. At the same time, we also look for any way to escape our pain with a facade of pleasure to relax our minds. Then the pain continues to rear its ugly head until we decide to face it. Yet, sometimes we never do.

Posted 4 Years Ago


¿

4 Years Ago

Very few get to overcome, and the rest are left to be in addiction as long as they don't harm us. I'.. read more
Some genius writer you are. Best of luck for your future creative endeavors

Posted 4 Years Ago


¿

4 Years Ago

Bunch of thanks for reading and your time =)

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