Pleasing Poison

Pleasing Poison

A Poem by NO MORE
"

.

"

Furling a piece of foil
into a hollow little roll
he puffs pleasing poison;
sleeps isolated from realism
There are pipe dreams in his eyes,
brightens when twilight disappears
His comatose brain films radiant reveries
at night, within his mind’s stilled senses
Ordeals of failure constrained him to shut
the shop of sterling virtues residing in his heart
Switched it to exhibition of aggressive notions;
inaugurated bad blood between him and life
When he finds no pleasing poison,
lacerating arms calms him down
Thirst and hunger abandoned
He’s a spectacular skeleton
in loneliness’s grave
  sans elation

© 2018 NO MORE


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

' He’s a spectacular skeleton - in loneliness’s grave - sans elation '

That anyone can find a means of creating beauty about addiction is beyond my understanding.. and yet, you have. Not sure what to say except your skill with words - especially these, is incredible, visiual and yet in some strange way, unique, stripped of subtlety.. the theme remains ugly and not magical.. yet you've cushioned its sin. Perhaps.

Posted 5 Months Ago


NO MORE

5 Months Ago

Hi Emma! I think all the sins and goods of this earth are worth to be praised...and so I gave a try .. read more
and each time the brain gets more comatose...the skeleton with less bone...loneliness is the digger of the grave he has put himself in...
the shop of optimism, definitely closed for repair.
j.

Posted 6 Months Ago


NO MORE

5 Months Ago

I've seen many people who lost their life due to drug addiction....and a few who came back from that.. read more
Indeed, people take drugs to feel good, but in reality they are a
"skeleton
in loneliness's grave
sans elation"

and unfortunately to the drug user drugs are "Pleasing Poison"
I enjoyed reading your work. Write on!

Posted 6 Months Ago


NO MORE

6 Months Ago

Haaa... a slowed down poison also...
Am really grateful to you for reading my piece...Will be.. read more
Wow. This blew my mind. The imagery and wonder for what comes next intrigued me and the final line. Deep.

Posted 6 Months Ago


NO MORE

6 Months Ago

Thanks so much Lavi for your valuable words....it's been days I've seen you here...hope you're well .. read more
These fine words are most deserving of the 27 sets of individual review comments they have so far notched up.. I shall be the 28th contributor and am proud to have found them before they hit treble figures, as I'm sure in time they will .. the visual appeal also adds to the readers enjoyment as its form resembles a tear a broken ampule maybe and the bowl of a chillum or crack pipe.. thoroughly enjoyed.. Neville

Posted 6 Months Ago


NO MORE

6 Months Ago

That is so kind and generous of you dear Neville...I didn't know that this piece would take a shape .. read more
Neville Pettitt

6 Months Ago

Wow.. that's a lot of thanks heaped on me my very fine literary friend.. I am indeed blessed & true .. read more
Very well written. I walked up to that edge in my youth and managed to turn back before going off. Lots of people I knew and grew up with did not. Your words reminded me of how close i was to it. Thanks!

Posted 6 Months Ago


NO MORE

6 Months Ago

Tis a very pleasant era to die slowly but surely.....but your return must've bloomed many smiles on .. read more
Wow Z this is so sad and so true, I have lost more people than I care to say to drug use. I have never been able to write my feelings on the subject yet. I usually just feel to upset to let it flow. But you did a fine job of it in this write.

Posted 6 Months Ago


NO MORE

6 Months Ago

Bunny my friend! Many many thanks for reading also for your valuable words upon this piece....
.. read more
Very nice poem. It is conveying a strong message which is much needed by the people to understand today.

Posted 7 Months Ago


NO MORE

6 Months Ago

Thanks so much dear Anjeline for understanding my message...Stay safe and Be blessed💖
Sjoeee- self love is needed here- not harm- i understand how tough life can be but you are tougher i truly hope u find your peace and come to see that we need to nurture iurselves and not allow the world to dictate our emotions and actions- all is possibke when we see the light at end tunnel- very emotional right- pray all is well🌹

Posted 7 Months Ago


Wonderfully crafted, subtle yet thought provoking imagery and such a fantastic choice of words. There's a sync and sense to everything you wrote. This is a remarkable piece of art

Posted 7 Months Ago


NO MORE

7 Months Ago

You're inspiring and I thank you for being that...also for giving this piece a visit...Thanks a lot .. read more
Abhishek Izy

7 Months Ago

Pleasure was all mine, dear friend!

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

1343 Views
42 Reviews
Rating
Added on October 9, 2018
Last Updated on November 18, 2018

Author

NO MORE
NO MORE

Earth



About
An act of sympathy is more ruthless than a thousand tortures" ........................................- Tahsin.Z🍁...... My small size eBook named "Thousands of City Lig.. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..