The Agony Of Victory

Written for the "Seen Through Others" haiku contest, which required the use of the word "warrior"

 

 

 

 

 

A warrior sleeps.

Silent tears grace hardened face.

Hearts break ev’rywhere.

 

Author's Note

This Haiku was written for the "Seen Through Others" contest, which required the use of the word "warrior". I realize that it strays from the traditional "nature" haiku.

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

It's more like a senryu, I think, but they're basically the same family and use the same structure etc, it's just haikus are about nature and senryus are humanity, humour and stuff. From the use of the word 'warrior', sounds like the contest is open to senryus as well as haikus, since there are a limited number of animal/nature similes involving 'warrior' lol.
I think the language of this is great. it's so hard to write a decent haiku-type poem...for me it is anyway, because I struggle with the word limit. You've done a nice job here.

Good luck in the contest.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

An excellent haiku, you did a great job writing this. Nice work!!!

Heather

[Angel Bird]

When I read this it simply took my breath away.
These few words are overwhelmingly filled with grace and beauty in sadness, as with poignant truth!
A magnificent work! A genius created greatness in these lines ...

[maiarusm]

Sadness and regret are what I felt upon reading this. The loss of innocence when a warrior (or soldier) kills in battle... It is well-written and well-described in this piece.

[None]

Quite beautiful and pensive! I like your words, "Silent tears.." showing how warriors rarely show pain and sadness. You outline the emotions and the warrior's story exceptionally well within this tiny treasure. Your Haiku is so very well written and beyond fitting for the contest!

The art of Haiku displayed here is to come up with a wonderful art in a few short strokes.

You have a masterpiece

[Legion]

Good write.

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I liked this! It says a lot in just a few lines. I liked that it strays from the traditional haiku. Great job!

[Candle in the wind]

The warriors battered fighting the battle of life the battle of survival...yes its beautiful and poignant!