I am a lonely bird .

I am a lonely bird .

A Poem by Taniska 😊😊

I am a lonely bird with no freinds but with full of enemies.

I am a lonely bird with full of questions without any answer.

I am lonely bird with full of courage without any fear.

I am a lonely bird with no regrets but with full of contentment.

I am a lonely bird with full of hope

I am a bird with full
of happiness
waiting for a good
freind.

© 2018 Taniska 😊😊


Author's Note

Taniska  😊😊
Pls read it ! If you like it then share your feelings. 😊

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I love the way your message seems to start out in a more stark way, then it gradually flows into a more upbeat ending. It feels as if this lonely bird is fighting thru the ravages of everyday living, trying to find the light where we all wish to be most of the time if we can. You make it sound like a beautiful struggle. Your use of the word "with" is not correct in many cases. I'll give some examples below (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

L1: "but with full of enemies" . . . suggest: "but surrounded by enemies"
L2: "with full of questions" . . . omit "with"
L3: "with full of courage" . . . omit "with"
L3: "without any afraid" . . . suggest: "without any fear"
L4: "but with full of contentment" . . . omit "with"
L5: "with full of hope" . . . omit "with"
L6: "with full of happiness" . . . omit "with"


Posted 5 Years Ago


I also have written poem on "I am lonely soul" sane as yours

Posted 5 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Taniska  😊😊

5 Years Ago

Thanx for your nice comment but for your kind information I am a beginner.
Amada

5 Years Ago

Seriusly, wese mujhe bhi 1month k around hi hua h writerscafe pr, welcome in a new world.
Taniska  😊😊

5 Years Ago

Thanx and same to you

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Added on August 27, 2018
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Taniska  😊😊
Taniska 😊😊

Cuttack, Odisha, India



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