I Wonder If She Knows

A short poem written about The Wife. How much have we gotten away with?

I wonder if she knows,
How her husband looks at me,
When he thinks nobody is looking and he sees only me.

I wonder if she knows,
How her husband speaks to me,
When he thinks nobody is listening, nobody listening but me.

I wonder if she knows,
How her husband touches me,
When he thinks nobody is looking, nobody looking but me.

I wonder if she knows,
How her husband moans for me,
When he thinks nobody is listening, nobody listening but me.

I wonder if she knows,
How her husband feels for me,
When nobody is looking and he sees only me.

Author's Note

What do you think of the structure?

Reviews

[Kat Marie]

Love the structure! The anaphora is genius for this poem. The way it gets more intense and intimate as the poem goes on... So good. The theme reminds me of "Not The Only One" by Sam Smith, lol. But the delivery in yours is much more intense and straight forward.

[S. S. Kular]

Hi Tash, I am new to this too. I do like the structure, but please take this as a positive criticism, if there is such thing, I had to read it a few times and I just felt like I was searching for something more, like if you began something and touched the surface and got out before you went deeper, I guess I just wanted a bit more. It could just be me, but I do like the title and structure.

[Tash Wills]

Thank you for your review. You know, it's funny you should say you felt you wanted a bit more because as I was writing it and again when I've read it back I felt the same way. As if there was something missing..? I'll work on it!

[Senu Jayasinghe]

rhythm and the rhymes are excellent. Also the flow of this poem makes it very catchy.once I started reading I couldn't wait to go to the next part.And I really like the structure.

[Julia1525]

Hi, although I don't like this kind of thing in real life - you know like everybody - I really think that you did solid work on this one. I find the describtion and the title catchy and the poem has a nice rythm and contenoity to it ... I like the structure as well. Julia

[Tash Wills]

Thank you, I appreciate you taking the time to review it. I hadn't really thought much about the description so I was surprised you mentioned it-glad you liked it though!