Trapped In Your Hell (What Happened To Us?)

A song

Without you, there is no me.

What happened to that simplicity?

Take my heart and tear it to pieces.

I'm still alive and my reason is...

You.

I'm living in this Hell.

I saved you then I fell.

Babe, you know damn well

I'm living in your Hell.

My veins are dripping now

With the blood you've spilled.

My mind is losing now

And my bones have chilled,

Frozen and broken.

The battle is lost.

I'm living in this Hell.

I saved you then I fell.

Babe, you know damn well

I'm living in your Hell.

See these scattered pieces of me?

Stab me and watch me bleed...

Again.

Watch me bleed,

Yeah watch me bleed out on the floor.

We're frozen and broken.

Our battle is lost and now...

Now we're trapped in your Hell.

Author's Note

Please leave reviews, I basically found my inspiration in Bring Me The Horizon and Pierce The Veil. It's my first song in almost a year so I'd love to hear your opinions. Constructive criticism is more than welcome.

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Firstly, I would have thought inspiration came from Iron Maiden, but that is just me. This made me think of a TOTAL F&%ING MELT DOWN, which is why I like it. Possibly someone swinging a hammer into a wall, not sure, that is what I like, A NICE MELTDOWN.


cheers

[CHRIS ANDES]

there's a lot of irony here
where two rival things bumped into each other
=]

[Starr Mist]

I like it a lot. It was very discriptive, it needed some music to go with it to give it more justice than lyrics on a screen, but I was listening to some soothing classical music while reading this and that tempo with this song would work together.

Very well done! I liked it a lot!

Happy writtings,
Starr Mist

[kingblaq]

Well, i'l criticize you.
1. When
2. Are u
3. Gonna
4. Record this?

Sick chorus..thanks for sharing

[Alex Vidmar]

Amazing. Love it Taylor.

[Lilmissy1996]

I absolutly LOVE this!! it's extremely deep!! it's amazing!!

[Chris]

I'ld like to hear the music you intend with this... to get the sense of it's pace and emotion! It looks good on the paper.

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is kinda painful, descriptive and i like your flow of words!
I like this, i mean chorus:
"I'm living in this Hell.
I saved you then I fell.
Babe, you know damn well
I'm living in your Hell."
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

[quarintine_deathangel]

According to this, hell apparently froze over, So do pigs fly yet? XDD Your imagery and explanations here are very enveloping and descriptive. The chorus
'I'm living in this Hell.
I saved you then I fell.
Babe, you know damn well
I'm living in your Hell.' Clarifies your tone and sets to stone the meaning. It would be an interesting song if you end up getting it recorded :D

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I love this, and I can definitely see why it's a song. It's a good one in fact :) I think some people can relate to this also.
Bravo! Expressing yourself, and it has such a nice flow too.




Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)