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Okay it's been a rough couple months as usual and things are finally starting to look better. This is not my usual type of writing but it felt good to write in a different style so here it is

come with me darling

take my hand, and

I promise everything

will be okay, I said

how can I think to trust

a man, that can

succumb to such lust

and hurt me that way, she said

because I have seen the dark

I have seen the absence of life in me

I've heard the hell hound's ferocious bark

and almost gave in so easily

but to die would be easy, and to change would be hard

like I said my love, I have seen the truth of the dark

but if you are shrouded in dark

then how can you see

through the shadows of fear

to begin to find me?

because my heart is yours, and yours is mine

and I'm guided by your presence

so soft, yet so divine

calling out to me from the darkness of doubt

like an angel lifting me 

from that awful Hell's mouth

but if guided you were

find your way you did not

so why should I believe

It's such change you have brought

because guided I was, yet still

fiercely through hell I fought

only motivation was you

the source of every happy thought

for love is strong yet it is also blind

so this is my proof to you that

even in the darkest of days, I will still find

the stength to carry on through

and follow my heart, until I have your hand in mine

Author's Note

Please give me the most honest feedback with this, any constructive criticism would be good, don't be afraid to be harsh if it will help...just don't be an ass for no reason. Thank you. P.S. Title ideas anyone?

Reviews

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I like the play between two constrasting views..would be easier to follow if the type was different for each perspective..

[Carrion.]

hmm. I really enjoyed this type of writing. even though its not your usual,
its amazing.
honestly I cant think of a title. ._.

[Sweets]

This is great, and i loved how you switched the moods of this poem...umm..I think the title should be...like...something good blended with darkness..kinda like "Lost in the beauty of the dark?" but I think it's too long for a title...or it can be "beauty of darkness" ._. Dunno, it's really hard to pick a title for this poem, but this was great!

[Tasha]

This was really good, I liked both points of views.

"because I have seen the dark
I have seen the absence of life in me
I've heard the hell hound's ferocious bark
and almost gave in so easily
but to die would be easy, and to change would be hard
like I said my love, I have seen the truth of the dark"

This stanza really struck a chord with me. Honestly I like it without a title. Great write, you are so talented!
♥ Ta'Shandra