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A Poem by Taylor Williams
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Okay it's been a rough couple months as usual and things are finally starting to look better. This is not my usual type of writing but it felt good to write in a different style so here it is

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come with me darling
take my hand, and
I promise everything
will be okay, I said
how can I think to trust
a man, that can
succumb to such lust
and hurt me that way, she said
because I have seen the dark
I have seen the absence of life in me
I've heard the hell hound's ferocious bark
and almost gave in so easily
but to die would be easy, and to change would be hard
like I said my love, I have seen the truth of the dark
but if you are shrouded in dark
then how can you see
through the shadows of fear
to begin to find me?
because my heart is yours, and yours is mine
and I'm guided by your presence
so soft, yet so divine
calling out to me from the darkness of doubt
like an angel lifting me 
from that awful Hell's mouth
but if guided you were
find your way you did not
so why should I believe
It's such change you have brought
because guided I was, yet still
fiercely through hell I fought
only motivation was you
the source of every happy thought
for love is strong yet it is also blind
so this is my proof to you that
even in the darkest of days, I will still find
the stength to carry on through
and follow my heart, until I have your hand in mine

© 2011 Taylor Williams


Author's Note

Taylor Williams
Please give me the most honest feedback with this, any constructive criticism would be good, don't be afraid to be harsh if it will help...just don't be an ass for no reason. Thank you. P.S. Title ideas anyone?

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I like the play between two constrasting views..would be easier to follow if the type was different for each perspective..

Posted 8 Years Ago


hmm. I really enjoyed this type of writing. even though its not your usual,
its amazing.
honestly I cant think of a title. ._.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is great, and i loved how you switched the moods of this poem...umm..I think the title should be...like...something good blended with darkness..kinda like "Lost in the beauty of the dark?" but I think it's too long for a title...or it can be "beauty of darkness" ._. Dunno, it's really hard to pick a title for this poem, but this was great!

Posted 8 Years Ago


This was really good, I liked both points of views.

"because I have seen the dark
I have seen the absence of life in me
I've heard the hell hound's ferocious bark
and almost gave in so easily
but to die would be easy, and to change would be hard
like I said my love, I have seen the truth of the dark"

This stanza really struck a chord with me. Honestly I like it without a title. Great write, you are so talented!
♥ Ta'Shandra


Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on September 7, 2011
Last Updated on September 8, 2011
Tags: Love, change, redemption, courage, determination, relationships, life

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Taylor Williams
Taylor Williams

Winston-Salem, NC



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Well i figured id redo this since a lot has change. Im taylor williams still but im now twenty years old. I joined the marine corps in june of 2012 to help further myself physically and mentally. I lo.. more..

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