How A Boy Became A Man

This is a story song. pretty much about why i decided to join the marines and how i found the strength to get the love of my life back and fought for it until i had her. I plan on proposing beforeIgo

I woke up today
with a stunning
realization to face
all my friends are gone
yet here I am still rotting in this place
asking myself
day after day, what happened 
day after day, what
HAPPENED
AND WHERE DID I GO WRONG
MISTAKE AFTER MISTAKE
HOW F*****G MANY
WILL IT TAKE
BEFORE I

stand myself back up
turn around, fight this war like a man
never give up, never lose faith in myself
I can do it, but I need you there to help

I know you're scared
and I cant blame you
too many chances given
just to be heartbroken again
but no matter
how long it takes, I'll keep trying
no matter how long it takes
I'll keep
TRYING
FIGHTING MY WAY BACK TO YOUR HEART
TO SHINE A LIGHT, WHEREVER THERE IS DARK
ERASE THE FEARS, RE-IGNITE THE SPARK
TO BRING BACK THE BEATING
BEATING OF THE HEART THAT WE ONCE SHARED
AND BRING BACK THE LOVE THAT WE ONCE HAD

I'm stronger now
than I was back then
found the strength to stand back up
but for you I'll gladly kneel
presenting a gift of what I feel
to show you that this time
that this time it is real

I woke up today
its time to leave, but I'm proud to say

that I have my angel in my arms

I've got my angel back in my arms 
never gave up, never lost faith, in myself
kept my head up, and made it through this awful hell

it's time to leave, but I'm proud to say
I'm gonna fight this war like a man
and if I die, they will find, a picture of you in my hand
but if I survive, you ll be the reason i, was able to make it out alive
and once i have you, back in my arms

 i wont let you go again
i promise you, i wont ever let you go again

Reviews

[Lane-roe]

A good old coming of age poem-my favourite! I really like the flow you've got going-it keeps me reading on to the next bit. A little more consistency may do you some favours (for example, keeping each verse the same length) - but at the same time, the different lengths help to keep the reader interested and reading on. Perhaps just try to experiment and find the right balance in between. Very passionate and engaging piece though-well done :)

[Taylor Williams]

really apppreciate everyone whos read this without posting a review. i may not be reviewing anyone elses work but i havent had access to a computer and when i do its for a very short amount of time and i dont have time for reviews