POVERTY

poverty, the deep rooted  satire of the human race

has  pierced our  society

our recognized unity has failed apace

in contriving the dissent  against paucity

long it has thrived

and will impoverish the advancing lives

it is the onset  of  miserable times

that will drive one to contrive days based on  fights

and has  paved a way for the crimes

poverty is the scarcity , dearth or the  state of deficiency

may it not behold the worldly life

for it drives one  out of lavish  inhabitancy

And  its legacy is eternal strife

 

Reviews

[Johnny Dep]

I completely agree with you, Words you chose and the way you played with them is beautiful.
And I must say it's a beautiful write Tazeen.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you so much! It really made me smile!!

[Johnny Dep]

You are welcome.

[Sami Khalil]

An amazing poet and humanitarian. The world represented by all the good agencies should strive to end poverty and malnutrition in the world instead of worrying about more wars and weapons. I believe in helping people to help themselves...Excellent...:)...........

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I agree! Self help is the best way out.
Thank you for reviewing :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................

[shade]

yeah proverty sucks, and i would guess makes anyone mad too know there is people out there that is hungry while others are driving a big car and whining it is already a few years old

and you know what else pisses me off, even tho i might not be any better but i do know they if we never wasted so much money for space travel we would have solved world hunger

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you for reading and expressing your views on it.
I completely agree that solving problems of malnutrition should be the primary aim of UN.

[Valentine]

Much truth in this, this is one reason why educations are so important. Better schooling...better jobs. Valentine

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I agree! thank you so much for the kind review...

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and true words. I saw Africa and Asia starvation. I helped the United Nation try to feed the many. A impossible task for the few. Starvation is accepted. Rich and poor countries spend billions on the war machine and forget the common people. Thank you Tazeen for sharing the powerful poetry and thoughts.
Coyote

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you
I was delighted to know that you mentioned United Nations!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. USA could feel the starving people in our world with 10% of the war budget. This is sad. You are welcome.

[Robert]

I well remember poverty way back in the '30s. This brings it all back in your well worded poem.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you sir!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, as barley girl expressed....amazing vocabulary here although it stopped me at times...in spots the words drew a bit too much attention to themselves rather than the overall feeling of the poem....but i do like the theme here...and even the richest are not immune to a poverty of the heart and soul...

that is for sure.

j.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you sir :) , I would positively work towards the correction of the flow in the future...

[barleygirl]

I admire the way you define poverty differently than people usually do . . . it isn't always about money & possessions. Rich people can be sadly impoverished . . . (I feel this way about president-elect Trump in the USA at times, even tho he has billions of $$$). Your use of language here is well-done, but also a little complex for some readers, maybe. I like it when a writer uses unusual & complex words, but sometimes it can sound more cerebral (in the head) than coming from the heart. It's very rare to see anyone rhyming with complex words, which is hard to do. Especially when I see you're only 15 & English might not be your first language . . . nobody would ever guess that you have any deficiency in using interesting words correctly.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I thank you from the depth of my heart...your review is quite honest

[M. L. F.]

What a STUNNING STANZA.... 15 you say?

"poverty, the deep rooted satire of the human race has pierced our society"

What a gorgeous piece this was...

Steeped in depth and global view. You see this issue much as I.... I love how you shed light on the idiocy of the existence of poverty as a whole. May we all do what we can to abolish it..

Mature well beyond your years... Do not let society taint you, the world change you... Your soul is pure. Your eyes open. I hardly feel so impressed...
..Misty

[M. L. F.]

My very small library now has a new gem...

[Tazeen Ahmed]

whoa! I Thank you from the depth of my heart ...
it's literally impacting my guts to write...
it means a lot
thanks again:)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

i'm 14 now and going to turn 15 this December (18)

[M. L. F.]

Wow... intense view for someone your age. Intense view for someone any age. Have you ever taken the MTBI ? It is the personality type testing that colleges use and I heard once even the FBI... I bet you are what I am... INFJ lol. Here is a link to take the test if you would ever like to.... Have your parents check it of course first... to approve, etc.. but colleges use this test and it is quite interesting. Although I wonder if you are too young to test still. Your personality is still forming, but you can find out what you are and is interesting to learn about yourself... Just saying.... Here is the link... Keep writing.... you've got some skill...

http://www.humanmetrics.com/cgi-win/jtypes2.asp

...Misty

[Tazeen Ahmed]

That's really kind of you... I would surely go through this... Thank you :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I got a type - INFJ

[M. L. F.]

LOL.... thought so. :) very cool... welcome to the unicorn club. It is a very rare type. Ha.

[The dark story]

With the growing age, the gap between the poor and the rich has increased more. It really now seems like an 'eternal strife' if we aren't going to eradicate it.
A very good poem with a strong message

[Tazeen Ahmed]

thank you , i'm happy that you enjoyed :)