Goodbye my enemy

Goodbye my enemy

A Poem by Tina
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This is written about my ex narcissistic girlfriend

"
Goodbye! goodbye! goodbye!
you have a hole that no one
Can fill. That not even love can 
Heal. you wanted my pain, but
Not my song. Not my smile but 
Bitter spite. You made me your 
Hell, but not your heaven. Stuck
 in an endless loop of darkness
And insanity. This tug of war with
My heart must End.  I will be free,
I will not let you take me down 
With you. Good bye my once love..
My enemy. 
Sept19,2017

© 2021 Tina


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"you wanted my pain but not my song..
you made me your hell but not your heaven.."

I found both of these lines particularly powerful.. this was not a long piece but every word is a testament to this: "This tug of war with My heart must End.
I will be free,
I will not let you take me down"

the ascension of the human spirit is an awesome thing to behold.. and I mean that sincerely..

"you haven't a hole"
I reluctantly question authors.. I think it's their story to tell.. however.. I can't seem to make this sentence fit.. did you intend to use "haven't" or perhaps it was the positive form of "have" that you intended..

Posted 21 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olla

21 Hours Ago

well.. my comment didn't post as I intended either.. so there you are.. common ground.. I really lik.. read more
Tina

21 Hours Ago

Thank you for reading I really appreciate it
olla

21 Hours Ago

thank you for sharing it.. I really appreciate that..:)



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i like the courage i sense in this one .. especially as coming from a woman who was being used ... your heroine found her strength .. has picked up sword and shield ... engaged the battle for her very life .. both inside and out. Strong anthem in this says i ... straight and to the point ..read like prose
E.

Posted 13 Hours Ago


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well, your poem is quite pretty.

Posted 19 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tina

11 Hours Ago

Thank you , it was written at a not so pretty time in my life. I like how poetry helps people get t.. read more
"you wanted my pain but not my song..
you made me your hell but not your heaven.."

I found both of these lines particularly powerful.. this was not a long piece but every word is a testament to this: "This tug of war with My heart must End.
I will be free,
I will not let you take me down"

the ascension of the human spirit is an awesome thing to behold.. and I mean that sincerely..

"you haven't a hole"
I reluctantly question authors.. I think it's their story to tell.. however.. I can't seem to make this sentence fit.. did you intend to use "haven't" or perhaps it was the positive form of "have" that you intended..

Posted 21 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

olla

21 Hours Ago

well.. my comment didn't post as I intended either.. so there you are.. common ground.. I really lik.. read more
Tina

21 Hours Ago

Thank you for reading I really appreciate it
olla

21 Hours Ago

thank you for sharing it.. I really appreciate that..:)
Interesting poem piece about an enemy. We all have our enemies it seems.

Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tina

2 Days Ago

Thanks for dropping by
JungLee

1 Day Ago

You are welcome

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Hi I'm Tina.. I'm 53. I've written short stories and poetry off and on for years. I enjoy reading poetry. A lot of my short stories do leave people wanting to know more, I like that. Whenever I try .. more..

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