You Didn't Ask

I fell in love with your soul

you should know that but, you didn’t ask

 

I fell in love with your words and the way you speak

you should know but, you didn’t ask

 

I would accept things the way they are

without any changes but, you didn’t ask

 

the lifestyle I’m looking for is easy

to define but, you didn’t ask

 

a simpler life I seek but, you’ll never know

because you didn’t ask

 

I wouldn’t have changed a thing but,

you’ll never know because….you didn’t ask

 

Reviews

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A solid piece of writing Temperance. With a message that resonates with the heart that has ever loved. One can easily find in their past a person who may not have felt strongly about them as they did. It's why the heart breaks sometimes. Thank you for sharing your poem with us.

[Temperance]

Love and heartbreak seem to be a common theme of many poets. I suppose we write best of what we have experienced and, I think putting that heartbreak to words is, in itself, a healing process.
Thank you for taking the time to read this and for your kind comment.

[Dilan Gray]

I love this. It feels so relatable, the one-sided love affair. Your words are so powerful.

[Temperance]

Thank you, Dilan. I'm glad you liked it and, thanks for the review! Temp

[Dilan Gray]

You're welcome! I love your work!

[Temperance]

That means a lot!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

If it's something they should know I think it's our duty to inform them. Or perhaps it's something the narrator would rather keep under wraps. Silence of entreaty doesn't always reveal a lack of interest though. Sometimes it's only a symptom of a shy and inverted nature. Thanks for the enjoyable read. F.

[Temperance]

Fabian, thank you for stopping by and leaving a review. I agree with you about sharing/communicating on what should be known. This piece is an excerpt of real life. I suppose I could have expanded on it to include more info but, from the speakers perspective..the decisions that were made were one-sided. No consultation or discussion. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my ... a theme i don't remember reading much at all .. nice creative expression .. powerful ... yes! we are the race that likes to talk much and listen very very little .. to few times we make things about another .. and not ourselves ... a bit of dichotomy now i think about it .. tho your protagonist comes across as holding selfless love .. unrequited and emotively sad, to me .. the poem is itself all about the speaker ... pretty crazy as i think about that .. i really like this poem and it's approach .. it is a rare thing to love someone in such a way and a big tragedy it is not received .. and in this case .. not even asked for ;) fine read for me Temp!
E.

[Temperance]

Oh Mr. E, thank you for taking the time to stop by and read this piece. It means a lot to have you review my work. Actually, the live was mutual…until it wasn’t. Again, my new friend, grateful you stopped by.

[Temperance]

Oops....the "love" was mutual...not live. LOL!

[Einstein Noodle]

a loss that builds character when we let it eh!? ;) tho no fun at all. :(

[Richard Knox]

Temperance, thank you for this poem. I am a sucker for poems and stories of unrequited or lost love, and this one is relentless in its evocation of sadness and regret. Is there an unspoken layer wherein the writer is also accusing herself of not saying any of these things? “Because you didn’t ask…” [and I said nothing…]

[Temperance]

Dear Richard.....thank you, again, for reviewing my work. Interesting that you should interpret that "unspoken layer..." on what wasn't said. Hit me smack in the face. OMG...didn't even realize.. but, you are so right. Thank you for the depth of your observance.

[Richard Knox]

You are welcome. I’m bingeing on your writing now, and thoroughly enjoying it! Better than Netflix!

[Temperance]

Haha! Thank you!

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Dear Temperance 😔

The perfect title and matching refrains make this excellently rendered piece virtually dance up and off the page, into the mind, heart, and soul of most every poet … all one has to do is read their poems to validate this poignant truth.
The bigger truth is, if one has to ask for all that you've so eloquently posed that would have made this love sheer perfection, it was never meant to be from the onset … those aspects of harmonious hearts that know they need not have to ask.
Still, when one half of a relationship is blind to the other, they will never know, and there are many ways to ask for such wonders from a caring lover, and to give.

Obviously, words dipped from the well of a knowing poetess,
Thank you for your captivating, heartfelt skills! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Temperance]

Oh Richard, you have such a way with words. :>)
Thank you for reviewing my work. As you might surmise, there is much more to this than what landed on the page. This just simplified one perspective of the situation. Thank you for your positive reviews of my work! Means a lot..Temp

[lightsong]

The "You didn't ask" line wasn't about the simple line of "asking". it was about care, sharing, feeling close to the one who lives in our heart. that is the main thing in your poem, even in love, not all people love in the same way and it doesn't mean that it it wrong. I feel that You loved him in a different way than his, and to maintain a relationship needs to create harmony between the two persons. Thank You for sharing your honest words with us my friend, here wishing You all the very best.

[Temperance]

Thank you for visiting and writing your review. I truly appreciate it. One would think us Baby Boomers would have the love thing down..... :)

[Gee]

Aye, some folk are so self consumed that they think they are the earths axis and if made of chocolate would without doubt eat themselves:)
If you find a good one hold on tight coz they don't come around to often.
I found my good one in 1991 and have kept a tight hold since that day.
Good morning, Enjoyed the early morning read

[Temperance]

Gee, thank you for stopping by and reviewing my work. Glad you enjoyed it!

[Gee]

My pleasure

[keith moncus]

POWERFUL, POWERFUL, POWERFUL
did i say this piece is POWERFUL?
i wrote a similar piece years back ... 'and she asked'
uncanny eh?

[Temperance]

Oh my! I am so humbly elated with your review, Keith. Thank you my new friend. We’re you glad she asked?

[keith moncus]

read for yourself ... page 8 last piece

you do have very good writing skills

[Aura]

"You didnt ask", is a very powerful line in this piece and because they didnt ask, they never knew what the other person wanted, the communication was just lacking in this relafionahip which caused the heartbreaking circumstances.

[Temperance]

Aura, you nailed the point of this piece! Thank you for stopping by and reviewing this work. Communication is the key to successful relationships. Maybe he didn’t want to know?

[Aura]

Maybe that's why. It was my pleasure to read this.

[John the Baptist]

Count it as a lesson. In the future, stay away from narcissists.

[Temperance]

It's amazing how many life's lessons we encounter. I knew a narcissist not too long ago.....now that was a lesson! Walked away from that one and never looked back! Thanks for your comment John.