Easing

Freshly painted the walls closing in at great speed
Forty seven missed calls lightly taxed ounce of weed
My euphoric recall isolated my greed
In a world without those who we love

Threatening thunder shakes every cause on which I stand
Watch in wonder as angels keep up with demand
Standing under crude banners they can't understand
In a world without those who we love

Raise another drink wish all these problems away
See your bubble shrink into each lengthening day
Add another few shades to your fifty of gray
In a world without those who we love

So the lock down is easing upgrade your 'A' game
Find it morbidly pleasing apportioning blame
It's in colourless wheezing we find we're the same
In a world without those who we love

Reviews

[Meenakshi Dutta]

Amazing piece Tepo, can't take my mind off few lines. The hidden meaning behind it fits so well into the world we are living in. The tough times.
Best wishes.
Saga of dreams

[Tepo]

thank you Saga
Much appreciated

[Lawryie Mh-Lk]

I wish I could write that way!

[Tepo]

Hi Lawryie
Thanks for read and comment
If you like how this is written I appreciate it
If you would like to write this way I'd advice you to persevere
You are at least as good as I was when I started, better
Keep it up

[Lawryie Mh-Lk]

Thank you very much!

[Chris Shaw]

Powerful piece Tepo. In a world without those we love, we sure need a few props to help us through. Sad times we are living in. Lost a family member to covid two months ago, well before his time. All the best. A good composition and the repetition helped the focus.

Chris

[Tepo]

thank you Chris
So sorry for your loss
And yes
I've needed a proper or two
read morethank you Chris
So sorry for your loss
And yes
I've needed a proper or two
Truly appreciate your time and review
Ta much

[barleygirl]

This is some of the most powerful writing I've seen from you! These words are spat out with a vengeance that comes across as both relief & frustration. Some of your poems have this distinctive rhyme & rhythm, & here you've done it the best you do it. I can read a poem like this just to feel that & love it, without the words even penetrating my head, but just feeling the way the words roll. That's what you do better than almost anyone at the cafe, with regards to rhyme & rhythm. There are some brilliant touches here -- "lightly taxed ounce of weed" . . . "another few shades to your fifty of gray" . . . "find it morbidly pleasing apportioning blame" (that last one sizzles, it's so caustic!) This is top-notch writing backed up by powerful thinking (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Tepo]

what a lovely review Margie
Thank you very much

[Just Kim]

This is quite intriguing, nicely written and expressed

[Tepo]

Thank you very much Kim