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This is a poem i wrote for english class last semester. Thought I'd post it and I'd love some opinions.

 

 

The icy myriad of greens and blues swirl,
gathering strenght
Tiny diamond flakes dot its glossy surface,
as trembling worlds combine
Scooping up sand and shells in its icy embrase,
the tumbling soup eddies and flows
It grows,curving, frothing, bubbling and swirling

The wave crashes

Tiny bubbles tickle my feet as the wave ripples,
just barely covering my ankles

Reviews

[Phoenix]

I love it, of course! It makes me want to go to the beach....

[thecoolone52]

i like the outdoor short poems that talk about the beach and nature. Im a little sick of all the lovey dovey heartbreak stuff on here. So very good job