Misty Rose

Misty Rose

A Poem by The Golden Pen

Misty Rose by Mary Aris Copyright 2010 All rights reserved

I watch at dusk as the tides roll in,
Teardrops falling down like salty pellets
From misty aquamarine eyes crying
I look up to catch my breath as the sunsets.

The foamy sea with her wavy blue black- hair
A sultry, seductive mistress she seems to be.
With a nuance of  seduction and savoir faire
Seduced you and took you away from me;

And now all that's left  is this solitary rose
The nuance of an old-forgotten love affair.
As the waves break against the sand, so does
My heart break in tiny pieces in mid air.

As the sun slowly sets upon the horizon
And the light from the lighthouse yonder
Hits the waves in silent prisms I realize you're gone
Leaving behind this misty rose as a reminder.

Picking up the rose my lips quiver,
Mourning the loss of my beloved sailor.

©2010  Mary Aris

© 2010 The Golden Pen

Author's Note

The Golden Pen
I wrote this poem for a contest on Allpoetry.com and won silver for it.
You can find the original poem here: http://allpoetry.com/poem/6500139

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I am working on metre and learning how to construct poems in iambic pentametre but I generally do not write my poems in a constricted pattern to ease the flow of the pen, let the song of the muse dictate my words, and give myself a bit of freedom and poetic liscence.

Posted 12 Years Ago

You play on the heart strings like a maestro regular rhyme scheme excellent word choice and contents.
Only possible flaw is lack of meter

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on August 25, 2010
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The Golden Pen
The Golden Pen

Oxford, Oxfordshire, United Kingdom

My name is Mary Aris, A.K.A. The Golden Pen. I have published three poetry books, three children's fictions, one Gothic Novel and an Autobiography through Lulu.com. more..