An Endless Context

Everything is a reflection of my thoughts

Reflecting upon everything around them,

Revolving like doors without end

Rendering me a simple vessel

 

Like debris in orbit,

I can’t tell if it’s I who control my mind

Or my mind who controls I,

But never a power struggle.

 

The answers obscure behind the clouds,

In order for me to experience everything

The universe has to offer,

Partially…

 

…and the world kept turning without fault.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Very nice. I really enjoyed reading that. The first stanza had really good imagery and the ideas were well established. The third stanza emphasizes the rest of the poem and puts it into perspective and then the last line... that was the real hit. It was realistic and blunt, my favorite part of the poem. It was the second stanza that gave me pause and not in the good, intellectual spiritual whatever kind of way. The grammar really tweaked my nerves I guess... really badly that I almost want to block that stanza out of my mind because the rest of the poem was so wonderful. But I will say that in the second line of that stanza "I can't tell if it's I who control my mind" I'm pretty sure you mean "controls" plural. But other than that stanza... it is an amazing poem. I really enjoyed it.

[Daniel Gardner]

Very nice. No matter how your mind is turning the world keeps moving while we figure it out.

[Dutch Jr.]

You did it again!! Your abstract ideas are expressed so clearly in your poetry, which, might I add, is a very hard task to accomplish. It's like I can understand what you're saying and the message you're trying to convey, but I can't put it into words. 11/10.

Like debris in orbit,
I can’t tell if it’s I who control my mind
Or my mind who controls I,
But never a power struggle.

I loved this line soo much, I read it about six times. Your first stanza was also very abstract and extremely well expressed in this one. Awesome job.