Yearning

Yearning

A Poem by Katie Flores
"

A sickly desperate want...

"
Have my skies been blue?
Nay, say I, not without you.

Don't you remember how much i need you to feel like I'm me?
Goodness, you just left me out at sea,
With nothing to hold onto but a distant memory.

I know you are faulty, just as I am.
But can't you see?

Just let us be,
We have to be part of a plan.

I take you as you are,
Hold my pride deep inside,
Just so you won't see how hard i cried.

So I'll come in from the sea,
And we will play in the sand,
And lend to this fire, a fan.

© 2012 Katie Flores


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Katie Flores
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I like the piece a lot! your content is solid and I love the diction and syntax you use to pull it together. My only suggestion would be to use a more uniform rhyming style throughout. Switching it is okay, don't get me wrong, but allowing each pattern to flow a bit more before moving to the next would make it that much better. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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good writing here you describe the title of your work here. keep writing fellow writer

Posted 8 Years Ago


Katie Flores

8 Years Ago

Thanks Kelvin.
kelvin

8 Years Ago

you are so welcome
The title fits, I can feel what you feel as I read, love how this piece comes together.
Great job, well done.



Posted 8 Years Ago


wow. love it. it's just the right amount of sappy.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you just left me out at sea... Good write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Katie Flores

8 Years Ago

thank you :)
Sami Khalil

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.
awesome..... and lend to this fire, a fan.... loved it...

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like the piece a lot! your content is solid and I love the diction and syntax you use to pull it together. My only suggestion would be to use a more uniform rhyming style throughout. Switching it is okay, don't get me wrong, but allowing each pattern to flow a bit more before moving to the next would make it that much better. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Let it die down
all out, the expose ends
fire bends you
back. ;)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Aw...The emotions in this poem flowed perfectly in the whole piece...I can really feel the yearning of love in this...Well done!
:)))

Posted 9 Years Ago


ooooohhh how I feel the plea... you express with amazing imagery here!! thank you for sharing!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love ur description " a sickly desperate want"...love can be that way at times can't it? .. ..

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on March 29, 2012
Last Updated on September 21, 2012
Tags: fan fire, love, unrequtied

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Katie Flores
Katie Flores

I see pine, not palm trees, i see forest and dirt, not sand and beaches, CA



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i am starting to find myself. for the longest time i thought i could only be one thing, but im starting to realize... i can't. And well there's not much else to say... I am a pretty plain person, a.. more..

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