When I Close My Eyes

When I Close My Eyes

A Poem by TheJordBaker
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I wrote this on the train home tonight, it's quite 'unpolished' as a result.

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Time keeps passing; don’t let me make you late.
I always said one day you’d be a star.
Let me know you make it big and safe
and I’ll tell the world how wonderful you are.
Why, of everybody, did I choose you?
You are the constellation of dreams again.
These things we say all sound familiar too.
It may be that the way I’m breaking’s the same.
Words and whispered wounding, we hold on
but you’re crying and I don’t know why.
We won’t be apart for too long.
I’ll see you when I close my eyes. 

© 2012 TheJordBaker


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I felt this way many times whilst flying across the country . . . I should've taken the train . . . at least on a train you don't have to deal with air pressure and turbulence and dropping out of the sky because the wings were all iced up . . .

Posted 8 Years Ago


TheJordBaker

8 Years Ago

I find the train very helpful because I just stare out the window and think. I find that all sorts o.. read more
Okay, I really like your perspective on things! keep doing what you love because your pleasing others.

Posted 8 Years Ago


TheJordBaker

8 Years Ago

wow, thanks very much!!
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I love this a lot. I feel a lot of us on this site can relate to the concept of this poem. Both your mind and dreams can be a very powerful thing. Great job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


TheJordBaker

8 Years Ago

thanks very much
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I love it! 'You are the constellation of dreams again' Gorgeous :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


TheJordBaker

8 Years Ago

thank you :)
I don't think this poem is unpolished - it is raw and that is what makes it so beautiful - especially loved ' let me know you make it big and safe and I'll tell the world how wonderful you are' fantastic!

Posted 8 Years Ago


TheJordBaker

8 Years Ago

thanks very much :)
I love it. Very beautiful :3

Posted 8 Years Ago


TheJordBaker

8 Years Ago

thank you :)
Bluefire

8 Years Ago

No problem
sad but awesome ....well done my friend

Posted 8 Years Ago


TheJordBaker

8 Years Ago

thank you :)

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Added on September 3, 2012
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Tags: when I close my eyes, eyes, close, star, poem, poetry, apart

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TheJordBaker
TheJordBaker

Washington, United Kingdom



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I'm Jordan and I've been away for a while, but I'm trying to refind my voice and work towards a couple of projects. In my late teens/early twenties I released two poetry collections which are avail.. more..

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