Captures (Unwritten)

As I took my daughter to wave goodbye to the beach where we'd stayed during each of the last 4 summers I took out a memo and made notes feeling it would be a lovely moment to capture in a poem.

With slow last steps,
perhaps, once more
in the rain it is duller,
yet still adored.
With her hand, now grown
just as in my arms
some years before
we partake in traditions.
The scents seem richer,
shades more hued.
The tide and the vessel
are seemingly leaving too.
Her hair ripples in the wind
as her hand waves to the reeds
as the swash out there far
which once touched the sand
where we built, where we ran.
Heavier come the rain spots
and so we must go.

Captures, brush stroked moments,
pallid ripples of sage and grey.
Orange of the boat a close beacon,
that of a painting, in the bay
fine in detail and colour, awe bitten.
Ahead of our last escape I wonder
how you are still unwritten.

Author's Note

As I revisited tonight I realised these notes were fine as they are unpolished as they indeed captured what this place had been to us and the hope we return.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

A special place for you and your daughter over several years. Your lines are beautiful. They speak of shared memories and capture the scents and smells of beach holidays that are treasured. It is good to remember such places in written form. Nicely conveyed Jordan. I liked the rippling of hair and the hand waves, resembling the movement of water. Something to read when you are missing this special place.

Chris

[TheJordBaker]

Thank you so much, Chris. I'm glad you enjoyed it and it captured its purpose :)

[Chris Shaw]

I did enjoy. Thank you :)

[lightsong]

it's in these true genuine moments, the heart writes with the sincerest ink, specially when a child with her pure heart is around, yes You wonder how You didn't write about it before? how this beauty is just here and You haven't capture it yet? lovely and gentle words radiating the same feelings of kindness, gentleness, calmness and tranquility, love the title too, Thank You for sharing Your special moments with us my friend.

[TheJordBaker]

Thank you very much :)