Edge

This is a story about taking risks. Part of my opinion and effect.

Edge

Hold my hand tightly and let us walk secure.

We'll stop at the edge of the water, we've never gone further before.

I stop to gaze into you, your eyes as bright as the sparkling sea.

I hope you feel the same way when you are looking into me.

It could never be scarier, when I hear you voice shake.

Please tell me that the bad news can wait.

Just let me touch your flesh once more,

I'm pretty sure

I'm so sure,

That I can make you fall in love again!

Just stick with me, let me remind you,

Why we stood together in the first place.

(I smile as I eye you, so content and so at peace.

You panic at the even utmost slight thought of losing me.

I'm glad you feel the same way, so with another kiss let me assure you that that is not what's happening.

No need to worry love, for I am only going through life,

I am not leaving you or stopping you from being with me.

I just want you to know, I am not so sure I see clearly.)

Oh dear, allow me to dwell within your thoughts.

I want to make the ink-stained thoughts clear again,

I do not want to be just a simple memory.

I want to be the only lover you see.

Can you not take a risk?

Can you not walk out on the edge again?

[You are my friend] So I guess it's okay,

If you hear me say... I'm already out there.

Take my hand and help me bear,

The fall. It is way too steep

Let us walk out unto the edge again.

I feel that you won't allow me,

To take a step into your violent sanity.

A storm is brewing within, 

I can feel it.

When your passion cooled and your temper was heated,

It starting the reign that made my thoughts feel defeated.

I know I can't amount to what you expect.

But I try my best, all in vain, but I do respect.

Your tithes, you pay in sweat and blood.

Your eyes are as gold, as the streets above.

I can't feel so much anymore.

Dear love, loving you is a chore.

Can you not take it?

Brush your tears from your cheek.

I know we'll make it!

This I swear as long as I live.

So if you should doubt, 

I might as well die tonight.

The sky is the most most beautiful hue,

Black and gold and a touch of blue!

The violet is raining in from the north 

And I guess now is when I'll need support!

Can you not take a risk?

Can you not walk out on the edge again?

[You are my friend] So I guess it's okay,

If you hear me say... I'm already out there.

Take my hand and help me bear,

The fall. It is way too steep

Let us walk out unto the edge again

I know it is an insane risk.

But I am trying this!

Reviews

[Sacsen Foote]

You surprise with most every poem. Typically speaking (there is of course many exceptions) I don't like poetry about love cause people tend to stick to the same formulas and metaphors, but you do something different every time which is not easy. Well done man.

[TheLastEclipse]

Thank you so very much. That means a lot that I can actually convince you to read love poems :D

[P.S.Chance]

I am impressed by this piece. you have quite the way of putting words together! beautiful.

[TheLastEclipse]

Thank you very much. I am very appreciative of your opinion :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a very lovely piece. I enjoyed the read. It was interesting. I loved how everything fit together. You did a great job. Thank you for sharing. :3

[TheLastEclipse]

And thank you for sharing your comments :)

[Angie Diane♥♥]

You're welcome :3
Don't worry I will review you more...when I'm in a better mood.

[frivolous treasures]

I agree with Sacsen down below. I tend to shy away from love poems because they are all written the same, depressing or mushy. Blech. But you, sir, have definitely made a difference with your words. This was different and intriguing.

"the sky is the most beautiful hue
black and gold and a touch of blue
the violet is raining from the north
and i guess now is when i'll need support"

Brilliantly said. I really liked this stanza... then the last line,

"i know it is an insane risk
but i am trying this"

really ended it quite nicely. Well, done sir. Bravo :)

[mandy]

all the emotions of lovers, the vows, the fights, the insecurities, the hope and challenge to make it work,,,loving you is a chore,,,,but,,,[you are my friend] that is so important,,

[TheLastEclipse]

I believe that so many couples actually forget that they were once friends and that all a relationship truly is, is the highest degree of friendship. Love is something else. It cannot be truly explained in one way.

[mandy]

i know.. i agree. it is wonderful when a couple are friends also

[Ella]

This is beautiful... you're such an amazing writer. I can't believe you actually wrote this! it is stunning.

[TheLastEclipse]

It actually took a while... :O but thank you :D

[Ella]

I bet, it would take me years and I wouldn't get anything close to this.

[TheLastEclipse]

Exactly, it'd be better!

[Ella]

No! No way would it be better! It'd suck!