A Short Long Story

A Short Long Story

A Story by Bradley
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Wisdom?

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An old monk wearing nothing but his clothes climbed down from a mountain.  As he walked away, he stopped and looked over his shoulder, paused, then continued walking. Once again he stopped and looked back. The mountain looked smaller than before and he frowned.  If only problems were mountains.

© 2016 Bradley


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Not bad, but the ending is very lackluster, and while I do think it's a good idea to keep it brief, there's really nothing interesting about it at present. The beginning is a good beginning, and it gives a clear image of the scene, but things go downhill from there.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Bradley

11 Years Ago

Of course it goes downhill, he was descending a mountain.
First I love the oxymoron in the title, very clever! +10 because titles are hard haha. I love your final line, the shortness works. I'm really curious about this monk and what other problems he could have! I would love to read the rest of his story. Great job. Perfection :)

Posted 11 Years Ago



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