Lacerations

Brother your whispers I hear in my ear,

Informing me of death I've nothing to fear.

As the blade cuts, my blood it will smear,

And it drips to the ground like a great ruby tear.

My vision is blurring, the end is near,

Miraculously my head starts to clear.

The blood flow stops and the cuts, they sear,

I'm covered in blood lying alone on the pier.

Brother your whispers I hear in my ear,

Telling me that I'm not to die here.

Reviews

[Jen]

I am obsessed with rhyme scheme, so I must say that I f*****g love the fact that the entire damn thing rhymes from the beginning to end.... I'm not sure exactly what the message is, if any, but regardless, I also like the imagery throughout the piece.... All in all, good f***ing work :P

[Georgia WILLIAMS]

haha thanks :) i dont understand it either.. in fact i barely remember writing this xD

[Georgia WILLIAMS]

thanks guys i appreciate it alot :)

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

This is sharp.
I must say that I like it.

-Elissa

[mystic soul]

great work............ i really like rhythmic compositions............ good one to read......