Broken Sky

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Behold, the frozen sky
A crystalline, celestial halo
Of misty veiled, nimbus light
Refracting, with a diamond glow
Enshrouding, the frigid star of night
Casting, a ghostly pall

Trespassing these, shadowy scenes
Wintry scapes, veil everything

With a coruscating, sheen
Glaze upon the earth, in icy sheets
Walking though crisp frost, with bared feet
Shivery wanderlust, stalking the boreal chill
Only breath breaks, the glass serenity still
A fragile form, shimmering, the faintest motion
Shining ephemera, mirroring, an iridescent notion
Sighs dance, with a whimsical evanescence
Roaming this quiet land, of sole existence
As misty shades of white
Dyed pink, from city lights
Steal the moon, and devour the starry night
Breathing deeply, the scent of snow
Bitter winds, freeze my soul
Cold snaps, from a broken sky
Raining crystals, delight my eyes
Darkness enshrouds the world, opaquely
Beclouded jewelry, adorns the breeze
I swim in a galaxy, of snow flurries
As the LSD, burns through me

Purple lips, and trembling limbs
Naked to the elements
Death’s sensuous touch, numbing senses
Bitten flesh, swollen and bruised black
Closing my eyes, under a final sky
’Neath a frozen blanket, I died
Icy seasons, soon bury me, deeply

Doomed, to an undying glacial tomb

Author's Note

I wrote the beginning many years ago, but the rest is very new, written after i had an epiphany about a purpose for the older verses. They were done in a stream of consciousness on a snowy night, which died out after 'iridescent notion' with a few scraps of lines i used later, such as 'jewelry beclouded air'.
I may be updating it as time goes by.

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

WOW!!! As I read through it, without reading your Author's Note, I noted the shift and then read the line about LSD, and thought it IS A TRIP!....Your descriptions are fascinating, rhyming superb, and story line gripping! The ending is awesome as a life of explosions comes to an end 'Neath a frozen blanket'.
Icy seasons continue to doom a life that leaves a legacy that may not undie!
Very good write!!...going in m fav file!

[Solitude]

Your ability to use beautiful metaphors to describe something as horrible as death never ceases to amaze me. I think I use that line too often when describing your writing, but it's always the truth. You possess a happy talent to create a serene icy wonderland, but I've learned to always read your work multiple times because you're consistent in adding in an un-wonderland-y element that I am consistent in omitting from my mind. Oh gullible little me. I read the word death and sky together, and the 14-year-old girl comes out and says "Oooh! Skies have rainbows! Pretty pretty, la la la!" That's the only thing I care about the first time around, but after I realize the absence of, "Pretty pretty, la la la," rainbows, I see the deeper meaning. Silly little girl. Anyways, it always brightens my day to read a beautifully written depressing poem by you.
Write on.
-Solitude

[Dani shedd Lottermoser]

A little sad but very well written.

[Bud]

This very much unique, creative, and most original.

"Darkness shrouds the world opaque
Beclouded jewelry adorns the breeze
I swim in a galaxy of snow flurries
As the LSD burns through me"

This is my favorite part. Astonishing, for sure. Great imagery.