No More Lies

No More Lies

A Poem by BarefootWings
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Hidden emotions and things left unsaid.

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Tell me not of how you love me nor hold me as I cry,
I find no comfort in your laughter and all your gentle lies.
I see what you are hiding and I know this to be true.
Bury all the whispers of your heart you like,
but I can hear it calling for something more to life.
Tell me, dear. (Oh, will you?)
When will this come to end?
I ask not for you to shed your darkness, nor let in all the light,
but do not try to continue on deceiving in the night.

© 2013 BarefootWings


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You have a good concept but some of your language choice is a little expected and bland. Overall this is very typical and there's really nothing to distinguish it from any of the other gobs of poetry on this topic - you need some kind of hook that'll keep the audience reading.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BarefootWings

10 Years Ago

Thank you for the advice and the review. I'll remember to try to have something they can connect wit.. read more



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Well its very interesting

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You have a good concept but some of your language choice is a little expected and bland. Overall this is very typical and there's really nothing to distinguish it from any of the other gobs of poetry on this topic - you need some kind of hook that'll keep the audience reading.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BarefootWings

10 Years Ago

Thank you for the advice and the review. I'll remember to try to have something they can connect wit.. read more

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Added on April 12, 2013
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BarefootWings
BarefootWings

Minerva, OH



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