Me (Journey of a Woman)

Poem written about how I see myself at times

Once long ago, my emotions wandered to and fro.
Treated rude and mean, afraid to be heard or seen.
Always glared at scornfully, I lived my life mournfully.

Loneliness grew, for happiness I never knew.
Love became a stranger, my soul was in danger.
What others saw as meekness, I knew to be weakness.

Unconditional acceptance I craved, to this end I did slave.
But their rules were all too rigid, their glances oh so frigid.
Beaten and berated, myself I completely hated.

Tears, they did nightly rain, no ease to the thundering pain.
No one could feel beautiful, when treated so pitiful.
Where life and love should bloom, I knew only gloom.

Deeper and deeper into the abyss I hurled, begging pleading, please take me from this world.
But somewhere lost deep inside, a little glimmer did reside.
Waiting patiently for its moment, to help ease my torment.

Spurred by their inhumanity, their unbelievable insanity.
Sick of always despairing, burning, burning to be daring,
Tired of the cold and the starkness, it emerged from the darkness.

Slowly, oh so slowly, my thoughts became less lowly,
Soaring higher and higher, I arose from the mire.
Wounds were tended and healed, my new spirit finally revealed.

Joyfully, now I shiver, in fear I no longer quiver.
Proud and tall I stand, their acceptance I fully demand.
Life, it flowed back to me, I have truly been set free.

Reviews

The message in the poem is all too familiar to me. I think slaving for acceptance is all we do, but there are a lot who fail terribly. However, this poem has a happy ending where the wounds are tended to and all is well. Good job.
I do feel that the rhyming got in the way, though. It would have been better as a freestyle poem, I believe. Take care.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I can relate to this piece very heartfelt emotion in this write.
great job.

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

i truly felt the emotion in this poem. I liked it alot, you have a way with words :)

[sayandeep kundu]

wonderful... :)

[MiidniightSoul]

This is such a great poem. Very beautifuly written and very emotional. I liked it ^_^