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The State of Me

The State of Me

A Poem by The Uncommon Muse

written after a stunning betrayal by a man I thought I knew



Is what my mind is



Is what my heart is



Is what my soul is



Is what my love is



Is what my hope is




© 2011 The Uncommon Muse

Author's Note

The Uncommon Muse
I question lightly whether thhis is finished or needs something more, but at the same time, it is simply an expression of the pain I felt.

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I don't think this needs anything more adding to it, it's perfect the way it is. Its stark and full of raw emotion. Beautiful

Posted 7 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Uncommon Muse

7 Years Ago

tank I read it I do have to agree...I think the piece is perfect the way it is. Thank you .. read more
I have to say it is finished. It tells the whole story, I think.

Posted 7 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Uncommon Muse

7 Years Ago I re-read it I have to agree. I think adding anything would only take away from the emotion.. read more

7 Years Ago

Take away and lessen the impact, I think
I don't really think there's anything subtle about it. The message is clear, and the feelings (or lack of) is made quite clear as well. With ever first word describing how the person feels I can imagine a stab going along with it. This piece drips with poison and seems like the writer is on the path to bitterness and hate.

Posted 10 Years Ago

a subtle yet straight to the point piece full of heartbreak and emotion

Posted 10 Years Ago

Very well expressed. Simple and to the point.

Posted 10 Years Ago

An equally astounding explanation of your pain, so well said. It's perfect as it is, because it's what you felt when you wrote it. you change it and it loses it's originality and realism.

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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6 Reviews
Added on January 31, 2011
Last Updated on January 31, 2011


The Uncommon Muse
The Uncommon Muse

Tallahassee, FL

I'm a writer focusing on erotica, fiction and poetry. I love creating characters and breathing life into them. I rarely write poetry just to write poetry. My poetry is intensely personal and is wri.. more..


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