Pain

Pain Amoung Individules Neglect

Pain is brought to us threw drama

We do not realize how it brought

However We do to realize the Pain

 

No one else knows how to deal with it except for us

Only few understand us

Untill that day comes

No one shall see us

 

Brought amoung us is neglect

Neglect hurts more than the pain itself

Neglect is brought by all individules around us

Desrtoying us slowly Neglect destroys the Pain

 

We understand eachother

For the pain is alwas here

Pain never goes away

It will always be apat of us

For we are one

The Pain is in us all

Reviews

[Katannaism]

Last stanza: 'We understand each other'. There should be a spacing in between the words as they are two separate words.
and 'It will always be apa(r)t of us.' Missed out an R there.
I encourage some proofreading and grammar/spelling checks before posting it up. But this a very good, strong piece. Very tragic, melancholic and I can feel the pain in this. Great job! ;)

[A.E. Surdam]

A very great poem which shows the truth of pain. Which we all have felt many times in our lifetime.

[DearSweetAgony]

WOW
Spoken like a true writer.
Everyone has had some sort of pain in their lives.
I think everyone can relate with is powerful write.
You did a very good job with the emotions.
Wonderful Job!