As I...

As I...

A Poem by TheUnforgivinFallenAngel

I miss you my friend...... *cries*


As I watch you die
I see all the memories crash down like waterfalls
to match my tears

As I see us growing up as children, I see nothing but the sorrow

As I hear the monitor go into a long, slow beep, all I can do is cry

As I walk out of the room
I remember all the plans we had together and I laugh at how ridiculous they were

So as I let the memories fall like waterfalls to match my tears I realize that even though you're gone we had great times together and i know I'll see you one day

As I walk along I am truly grateful for the times we had my friend
and I love you

© 2011 TheUnforgivinFallenAngel

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:) Sweet. And romantic.

Posted 8 Years Ago

you have a wonderful way of leading up to the climaxes of your poetry, you take us on a journey of emotions every time. :) very very good stuff!

Posted 8 Years Ago

"As I hear the monitor go into a long, slow beep, all I can do is cry"....
Powerful and touching. This sounds like it comes from the heart.
"Ridolous" --> "ridiculous"

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Very sad and crushing. This poem can go in many directions, and I like how you directed it on your memories, and your thanks to them.
"I see all the memories crash down like waterfalls" Great line :)

Posted 8 Years Ago

'like waterfalls to match my tears' what a touching simalie, and a perfect description of me while reading this. Quite beautiful, yet so, so sad. I'm sorry.

Posted 8 Years Ago

The scattered form of this poem matches the increasingly distressed and confused state of the poet voice. So telling, simple and yet beautifully told. The line about the monitor is particularly heart-wrenching. You're definitely good at writing tragic poetry.

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Added on April 24, 2011
Last Updated on April 24, 2011