Oceanland

Dreamlike sand. Soft enough 

To the fingertips, like sugar, but

Soft enough to make me wonder. Am I 

Alive?

The sky is blue, too blue, much too blue. 

Do I have a voice? Can I use it?

Everything trembles like an oasis

About to shatter. I am not walking on eggshells

I am living in one. 

The sun destroyed all of the clouds and now

It peers into my mind with a blinding eye. 

Too bright! Cracking its rays against my skull

Like leather whips. 

Bring back the rain, the thunder,

The ugly mud slathered on my feet. 

This realm is not my own. 

The ocean waves are slow… calm, 

Perfect. So perfect. 

I am a fracture in the diamond,

A shadow on this incandescent world. 

Even the air caresses my lungs with 

Featherlight fingers. 

Everything shimmers in my vision,

But panic seeps in without yield. 

Can’t scream, can’t breathe,

Seaweed lodged in my mouth

This flawless beach is about to capsize 

Once I rip the wails from my throat 

The tide whispers, all of my secrets

Traveling from crest to crest.

What do they know? How do they know?

(promise you won’t tell a soul) 

You lied!

Author's Note

Leave thoughts. x

Reviews

[Terrence Chang]

Well penned Falling Leaf. Liked it till the end

[MomzillaNC]

Highly emotive and surreal with a rapid fire flow in this one.

[quixotic_rose]

Another wonderful work! I'm absolutely delighted by the way the words flow, and how it evokes such emotion. It's intriguing and easily captures my senses to regale me in a delightful scenario that you've created. I hope to read many more that are just as capturing!

[Avinash]

This reflects unspeakable suffocation. Pain which can't find words are finding perfect frame here. I will call it a brave poem.

[Stanley Wilson]

Very clever work indeed. A good balance, left me wanting more!!

[LauraraMonique]

I have read at least three of your pieces and every single one of them are amazing. Excellent job. I hope you never stop writing because you have a very, very strong voice!

Blessed Be,

Laurara Monique

[Amber Lily]

Whenever I'm about to read one of your poems I always get excited because I know I won't come away disappointed. This poem has the perfect balance of light and dark, while you describe a beautiful place it seems to be killing the person there. A interesting and great write :)

[Haeshin]

Each stanza starts out calm in the first half and intense in the second. I like it.

[R Smith]

feels like i stumbled into your dream and i'm tripping over one scene after another, every stanza is a new excitement and a new journey, I can't promise i won't tell but its great and that's no lie :)

[Valentine]

For some reason this brought to mind when I had a tumor in my neck and when they removed it, coming awake, trying to speak but I had no voice. Later after 2 ops to have Teflon put into my vocal chord I could speak. I felt a lot like this mixed up person. Deep thoughts. Valentine