The Winter Stray Poem Part 2

The Winter Stray Poem Part 2

A Poem by The Winter Poet
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“This poem is dedicated to all who are in need and the ones who died waiting. For World Peace”

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He waits for the smoke to clear,
His eyes brown as a Blessed pear...
Could the dusk cleanse his fear?
 His mother comes home raped with lust’s tainted spear...

The wind aches for freedom,
A tree weeps in her dying breath...
The children crave for wisdom,
Bullets relish peace’s empty death...

The crying sky aches for a cloud,
Rain thus comes down to wash a tear...
Eyes look for the moon’s *laud,
Birds hide from the war’s painful sear...

The poor is naked as the rich eats,
A new sky paints his precious feet...
Hungry as his craving heart beats,
The birds fly again their previous fleet...

His fingers cry to a blood clot,
The broken nail speaks to him...
A pencil to fill the waiting dot,
He finds beside him a precious grim...

Eyes wait for Heaven’s dream,
Her breath is pale in need...
His face scratched with the crying seam,
An ice-cream is theirs indeed...

She looks at his empty eyes,
An Iris waits and cries...
The cream speaks to the ice,
The birds now sing in anxious tries...

His eyebrows look at her,
Her eyes still look at them...
The sky’s now an exemplar,
A tree now grows her stem...

© 2016 The Winter Poet


Author's Note

The Winter Poet
The Winter Poet’s Note – We do not fail when we don’t give; we fail when we can give yet we eat greedy.

Key from the Oxford Reference Dictionary:
*Laud - Praise highly.
*Exemplar – a person or thing serving a typical example or appropriate model.

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I liked the poem, its flow, use words...that's commendable for sure. But I just think the message that you tried to put across could have been put forward a little more clearly. It might get the reader a little confused to understand what it is that you really are trying to portray without reading the author's note and the description. That was my opinion though. Otherwise, I liked the poem and also the message that it gives, it's very powerful!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Winter Poet

7 Years Ago

Thank You for the review and your precious feedback, Pal. I agree! :-) Many a times when I read back.. read more
Flutterby aish

7 Years Ago

Your Welcome. :)



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I liked the poem, its flow, use words...that's commendable for sure. But I just think the message that you tried to put across could have been put forward a little more clearly. It might get the reader a little confused to understand what it is that you really are trying to portray without reading the author's note and the description. That was my opinion though. Otherwise, I liked the poem and also the message that it gives, it's very powerful!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Winter Poet

7 Years Ago

Thank You for the review and your precious feedback, Pal. I agree! :-) Many a times when I read back.. read more
Flutterby aish

7 Years Ago

Your Welcome. :)

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Added on June 7, 2016
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The Winter Poet
The Winter Poet

Chennai, Tamil Nadu, India



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